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Thank you very much

I thought it was nice, very vivid and the imagery was well portrayed :)

Well I am sorry, but it is more a story than poem :P

I don't think so, poems are meant o c reate vivid images and you get longER poems alll the time. :P

okay, and Sammii it's a short story - only one chapter so it won't lead into anything else. basically it's too long a detailed to be a proper poem :P

I don't necessarily like the content but I think it's strangely beautiful, although it's more like a poem, the description is vivid in some areas but lacks slightly in others. Really good but personally I would think iut's more like a poem, in a good way. Not sure where this'll lead into a story.

Two mistakes; first I shall put in a capital for you; "You're not here, your arms aren't around me. You're not keeping me safe anD warm." And I think it's the third lyric paragraph from the bottom where you've put "i" instead of a capital.