March 18th, 2011 at 06:52am
Just finished reading the first two chapters. I'm liking it so far. Seems to be an original storyline.
There was something strange about it though... maybe a little bit more character development..i'm not sure.
But I am starting to like it..its...intriguing :) Can't wait to read chapter three!!
"Jethro tore his eyes from the rusty steppes to gaze up at the poisonous-looking green-tinged yellow sky and sighed. He hadn't thought about Jethro's family." I think you meant to say "Adrian tore is eyes from..." etc etc?
Keep writing!