Hobo & Daddy - Comments

Wow! I usually don't read fanfictions, but this was just amazing!!! I really enjoyed it! It's REALLY well-written!!! Great job! :)

Another from the comment swap here. The idea of writing from Hobo's point of view is brilliant and it's all written beautifully. It's both upsetting and entertaining, if that's possible. With the perspective, everything is very clear and concise with no frills to confuse. Hobo definitely calls it as she sees it and it's oddly satisfying to understand the things she talks about but doesn't know the word for (like the brown water that makes Ryan walk funny.). Congratulations on first place int he contest!

{Comment Swap} Let's start with the bad news! I don't ship Ryden. Okay now onto the good news. It is beautifully written!! I mean wow!! Just wow!! The whole dog perspective was perfect and it was well written! Did I mention it was perfect!!? You're a good writer!!!

this probably one of the most brilliant things i've ever read. the contrast of such an innocent perspective narration very adult concepts and issues was so enlightening was also added humor. well done (:

I love it!
It's amazing and extremely cute (:

So, I've been a fan of your stories for quite some time but I have a bad habit of being a silent reader. I had not read this one yet, but, the title instantly drew my attention. The fact that Ryan named his dog Hobo amuses me to no end & the little tidbit he said once about why he named her that. Anyway, wow, this was such an amazing story with a very interesting perspective. I love Hobo's emotions & reactions to what Keltie, Brendon & Ryan did throughout the story. It was so cute that I almost couldn't stand it, like, when she expressed discontent because Ryan was making Brendon sad. That part about how the necklace Ryan got for Brendon wouldn't make a good toy amused me so much. God, I'd love to see an entire story with Hobo narrating it. This was just so astoundingly amazing. Expect more comments soon, because you never disappoint.

THIS IS ABSOLUTELY THE CUTEST THING EVAR.
I actually squealed while reading it.

This was so cute!

This was amazing, and so cute. I like not knowing the whole story behind Brendon's and Ryan's relationship. It adds a certain charm, a certain... mystery to it. I'd love to see some more stories like this

Great, amazing job. I really enjoyed reading from Hobo's POV. It was such a fun way because you could tell that the puppy was innocent and it was a really excellent job. I could definitely see a dog thinking this way.

This is the single most adorable thing I've read on here. It's amazing. <3 It made me smile.
Great job! You really captured the innocence of a puppy. I loved it.

So I've been meaning to read this for a while, and I'm really glad that I finally did. I absolutely loved it. Having it in Hobo's POV was very interesting and different-- I liked it a lot. It just gave a completely different view point of things. I just love how everything was described. This was just a wonderful story. Excellent job.

I saw the snippet of this on your Tumblr & now that I've read it, I'm so blown by it. You always write fabulously, but I love how you wrote from Hobo's POV. Hobo is innocent yet in the know. I really like that. Also, I love how the story had a sad tone to it, but has that happy little ending. I really liked this. I think you should write from Hobo's POV more often.

Dude, this is so good. Adorable and kinda sad but really good.

Oh, and funny and the end was happy.

I can sum this up in very few words: cute but sad.

The start of this story is kind of cutely weird. I love how Hobo refers to them as his parents and how he calls Brendon his "step" dad, it makes him almost human which is just great, really great. And then there's how he prefers Brendon to Keltie, it seems to show that he's the best for Ryan and he knows it before they all do.

And then there's the arguments that pop up and how Hobo tries to stop them and wishes he could just put them outside; this was just too cute and made me smile so much (even though it shouldn't have). Even though this part was depressing as fuck, it was also incredibly cute in the way that Hobo just wants everyone to be happy and for Brendon to stay because he loves Brendon.

I love how much Brendon flips in this next part because he thinks that Ryan has brought a present for Keltie which would mean that Ryan wasn't going to dump her. And the turn around in events, how Ryan just spits out that he's broken up with her and how the next part shows Hobo talking about how he wants to chew on the necklace Brendon's wearing...

This is just amazing Dru, really amazing. I would love to read a story from Hemingway's point of view or something if you'd ever write that... You just seem to be able to capture the pet's point of view amazingly well.

I know I’ve commented on pretty much…none of your stuff, I think? But I’ve always thought you were an amazing writer, and I must say, you are the only writer on Mibba that writes Panic! fanfictions that I can actually read. The style with which you write is beautiful and it flows amazingly well, and I feel as if I’m actually a person in the story watching everything happen. This story in particular drew me in because I love animals, and I love your writing, and the title is simply amazing. So I started reading, and I found myself unable to tear my eyes off of the computer screen while reading it.

I don’t know enough about the band to know who Keltie is or who Hobo is, but I do know that they’re both interesting characters to me in this story. Judging by the pictures in your banner, I’m assuming she’s actually his dog, and if she is, she’s absolutely adorable. I really liked seeing how you wrote this from the dog’s perspective rather than a human’s or a third person point of view. It’s something I haven’t seen done often in stories, and I think that you captured it very well. I didn’t see any grammatical errors, although that could simply be because I was so captivated by the writing that they weren’t noticeable.

I also liked how you described things in an off-center sort of way that that we as the audience would know what you were talking about without coming right off the bat and explaining what you were talking about, such as the smells and the necklace. I also liked how Hobo didn’t know what crying was, but she picked up on how it meant that Ryan wasn’t happy when he was crying.

I can’t speak highly enough about this story. It’s beautiful writing, and I am definitely going to be going back and reading it a second, third, and fourth time. Excellent job, Dru! ^_^

Aww, this was so sweet. I always love the stuff you write!

This was so cute! I smiled the whole time I read this. I love how you put the pictures in to break the story up, I'm going to start doing that too 'cause it really added to it. I love the layout, it's plain, easy to read, but has this adorable banner across the top. Hobo is so precious, I love her XD. You really got the personality of a dog, the way they sense emotions, see things as funny and tasty, and how they don't like getting their nose rubbed in their own pee. I actually have a dog who just loves the taste of my school and library books, so I can relate.

There were only a few mistakes I noticed, not a lot, but I figured I'd point them out so you know about them.

"Before he left he cleaned himself and even though he still smelled like the green stuff, but he smelled a lot better"

Take the 'but' out, you don't need it. Also, put a comma between 'himself' & 'and'.

"I love my Daddy very much but right now he's doing something..."

You need a comma before 'but'.

"Like sometimes he does things that make Brendon said

Needs to be 'makes' and 'sad'

All in all I loved the story. I'm so glad you joined my contest and wrote it. Thank you so much, I really appreciate it XD