February 7th, 2011 at 10:22am
this was very well written. i only saw one tiny grammatical fudge, and it's probably only a thing i'd notice, because i can be quite the grammar nazi at times. >.>
but i really liked this. it was kind of short, but it did reach past the minimum, so i cant complain, lol.
it reminded me slightly of my friend and i (except for the fact that we're not together), so i feel like its very easy to relate to and that's great in a story.
i wished it would have related to the picture more, or that it'd been included in the layout, since it is a picture contest, (thought the layout part wasn't a rule, so that won't count against you.)
overall it was really nice. good job deary!
I did type it quickly, and as for the picture, I didn't do as well as I had hoped in describing... but the picture was the scene I imagined the talk between Jodi & Aaron happening...
I'm not the greatest descriptive writer, I like dialogue, as you can see.
hehe.
:D