Dreams Will Carry You - Comments

It's very short, but it is packed so much. And i really adore this and can relate to this so much. I even love how you have the 11:11 at the top with the entire theme.

I can't believe I've never read this before!

This is such a powerful drabble RachBaby and it really got to me. It's so short but sweet in the way it gets to the point and makes you really think bout it. This was honestly an incredible beautiful peace that I'm glad I read.

Love it <3

I loved the last line especially. You use a really simple diction and syntax for this, and it's so short, but you've expressed a really complicated idea.
This is a story with such depth really, I love how you've used 11:11 for your chapter title and the story title is also just so fitting.
This is amazing, truly.

So, here's my second comment. Sorry I took so long babe.
You're story is short but sweet. I think it's simple and straight to the point. I guess deepening into it more, she is probably looking for a meaning to her life in general. I like it. I have real freaky dreams, so I'm always trying to look for a meaning to them.
I like :D

Oh and btw, your layout is nice and simple but still pretty :D

First off the layout to this was very simple and fit it fantastically. Very beautiful. <3 I also loved the summary. Summaries with quotes are always interesting...I also loved the code you used to make the words fade colors. Suited it all fabulously. (:

As for the content of the story, I simply adored every last sentence. I did read it in an accent - mostly because I just watched Harry Potter - and it seemed to fit very well in such an accent...not that that has to do with anything. XD Uh, yeah. I loved this.

The layout is just... amazing with the story. I like it a lot.

I don't really think I have a critique. It almost makes me think dreaming is complicated, yet simple.

I enjoyed reading this a lot.

I love the 11:11 title for the chapter. I’m so superstitious, and it’s a tradition I can’t go a day without! :D

I think this piece is really, really interesting. It’s simple and sort of curt, but it’s really profound and touches on an abstract concept that really personal and relatable and just really touches everyone. We do all dream and it’s a mystery for everyone and I really think you conveyed that whole thought really well.

I wished for an understanding of myself. I dreamt that night, too.
That is seriously a great way to end it. It’s really insightful and it really sums up the piece, while also leaving it open for the reader to be all, “oh, I wonder what she discovered.”

This is really amazing. I mean it.

This was probably one of the best drabbles I've read in a long time. No joke, this was wonderfully written.

I, too, have questioned countless times about dreams and underlying mysteries in them. I used to get told that dreams really, truly, meant absolutely nothing. But there must be some underlying message your body is sending you!

I used to dream about my crush liking me, two years ago. At first, I loved these dreams until I slowly fell out of love with him (or out of like?). But now, he's the one who likes me. Just like in my dreams.

So yes, lovely story<3

Amazing drabble. It really made me think and the endless possible meanings make my brain twitch xD
No mistakes, really cute layout, too! Your ideas in this drabble amaze me and leave me wanting more!

[font=2]Wow, this was excellent.

I mean, it's pretty deep. It's short, but it's so beautifully written. I loved this line:

Do we open our mouths to be silenced, or rather to be heard?

It's rather amazing. Totally the best line in the chapter to me.

You're a great writer, and you make me jealous. Keep up the good work, hon!

I'd love to say more, but there's nothing else, really. Overall, excellent job!

The layout is absolutely gorgeous for something so simple.
I like the chapter title. :)
Honestly, I can't say much, but wow.
That was deep.
I've always wondered about dreams, and this kinda just made me wonder more.
I"m definitely going to be looking up dream meanings after this.
Although it's only 100 words long, it's excellently done. :)

I really like the title of this :)
both the story title and the chapter one
I also like this layout- it's simple yet nice
and I love how the words in the summary are different colors
agreed with your impression on dreams.
they are just a big mass of thoughts you have
sometimes extremally random, and sometimes with true meaning
though this was short, this was very lovely and I liked it a lot :D

YOU. YOU ARE DEEP, MAN.
aha, no but seriously, what're you trying to do? MAKE ME THINK? BLASPHEMY.

It's short, like really short, but you've compacted so much into those words that even now, after reading, you're making me think. I adore stories like that, that just make me... think. They don't leave me like that, and believe me I get distracted easily, and they sort of imprint this thing into my mind. Like, really, what is a dream? Do they mean anything? Is it just my subconscious being bored? Is it sort of like a little gateway into what I'm really feeling? Should I really even dwell on this at all? I WILL NEVER KNOW. AND FOREVER, I WILL PONDER THESE THINGS, BECAUSE YOU BROUGHT THEM UP.

just a swirling whirlpool of thoughts and emotions; blurred images; fragmented conversation
I seriously think that's the best descriptions I've ever hear referring to a dream. I mean, really, half the dreams I have it's just a bunch of stuff smashed together with no real timeline or connection of what's going on.

Seriously, I love this. It's a thinker alright, but it's something I can think back to and be like "oh yeah, I read that" and stuff.
YOU REALLY HAVE TO START WRITING OR SOMETHING, GURL. TOO MUCH TALENT THAT I NEED TO HAVE IT.
All the time.
Breakfast, lunch and dinner.
:D

This is such a lovely piece.
I loved the layout for a start, but I think with your words it just became completely stunning.
I love the description, and how you wrote so much in so little.
Brilliant <3

just a swirling whirlpool of thoughts and emotions; blurred images; fragmented conversation.
I loved that describtion of a dream. It captured it perfectly, how confusing and blurry it is...

This was amazing, I liked how you managed to say so much in so little amount of words.

I loved the ending also, made me stop and think; "maybe my dreams are telling me something..." which I hope you were going for :3

If so you've made your point to this reader *points at self*

Great job.

Before I even began reading this amazing piece, my first thoughts were about the gorgeous layout and on how fabulous this piece was bound to be. If it's by you, it's got to be amazing. There's just no doubt in my mind, hehe. :)

as if my subconscious was pointless and irrelevant.

This line broke my heart to bits. Your subconcious is incredibly important. It knows thing, and in dreams, isn't it usually what guides them? Because your subconcious knows what you're trying to ignore or just don't understand. It's powerful and amazing. (: <3

Do we open our mouths to be silenced, or rather to be heard?

I liked how this line made her belief in her subconcious all the more realistic and sensible. It's very, very logical. Plus, it was just a really, really nice sentence. :) <3

I dreamt that night, too.

I liked this as a closing line. It was close to the way you opened, but after all the insight you packed in, it was so much more amazing.<3

I'm always sad to see any of your work end, but really, it doesn't end if it lives on in someone's heart. And that's what your writing does, Ray. It inspires me because your writing is truly beautiful, heartfelt, and I could read it over and over.

I love how much passion you packed into so few words. The idea and action of dreams seem to be very close to your heart and I'm glad you could share your appreciation for them with me. :)

If I didn't cover it before, I'll say it now: You did an amazing job - like always - on this piece. (:

First of all, I really liked the layout. It wasn't very dark, but still conveyed the right emotion of the story.

Your writing in this was amazing, as short as this was, it showed so many emotions yet it seemed contained. The words in this almost gave me chills, which is always good.

Also, I agree with bella, I think everyone's been in that place at least once in their life, so everyone can sort of relate to this.

Beautiful writing. <3

I love the layout; simple gray is always a win, no matter what you're writing about, if you ask me. I also love the banner. Very cute and very fitting.

The chapter title is great, too. I still make wishes at 11:11.

Last night, I dreamt.

I'm big on first lines. They're so important. They need to do so many things, and this one does all of them. It's short and to the point and makes me wonder what she dreamt about. I can't stop reading now, because then I'll never know .Great job. Exactly how you want a reader to feel.

As with most dreams, it made little sense – just a swirling whirlpool of thoughts and emotions; blurred images; fragmented conversation. A dream mustn't have an intricately weaved meaning, they told me, as if my subconscious was pointless and irrelevant. I believe them to be liars; why else would it speak? Do we open our mouths to be silenced, or rather to be heard? I’d never wondered what a dream was, rather why it seemed so specially scheduled and designed.

First of all, this paragraph is very eloquent. You've used beautiful, elegant language, and that's really catching and delightful. I also really want to know who they are. Just the generic they, or someone suppressing this person? I'm desperate to know, but won't leave the story unsatisfied if I don't, because you've left me enough room to decide for myself.

This is also a really great way to look at dreams. You've captured them well here.

At the age of fourteen, I wished for an understanding of myself. I dreamt that night, too.

I never imagined the speaker in this story to be fourteen. She seems much older. I might change the age for her to be a little older, but fourteen works as well.

Very good ending. Over all, great job!

I thought this was absolutely beautiful <3

I love how concise your wording is, and honestly, I'm a little jealous because I could never write anything this brief and have it make as much sense as this did. I thought the chapter title of 11:11 was a nice touch and really set the tone of the story right off. I'm also the type of person that always has to catch the clock at 11:11 AM and make my wish =3

The movement of this was what struck me the most. In anything else, I would think that it was a bit choppy, but I think that choppiness added texture to this story in the way that it sort of mimics our dreams, bringing all of these different aspects to the surface but never providing any reasoning for it.

As I read this over again, I kept recalling a movie on dreams we had to watch in my health class; I think it would've definitely been something of interest to you =D

I normally don't go for open endings, but I thought this one was fitting. I really like being able to interpret what happened to this character, and being on the optimistic side, I'd like to think that she found her place in the world.

I really enjoyed reading this <3

I like the layout, it's simple and muted and makes me focus on what you've written. I also love that the "11:11" aspect because I think dreams and wishes go hand-in-hand.

The story itself is simple yet profound. It reminds me of The Tao of Pooh, a complex concept turned into something simple. I've often felt this way myself, that my dreams mean more than my subconcious leads me to believe. Surely, there has to be something more beautiful than supressed thoughts in there.

Honestly, Rachel, you put words to things I've only thought about. I think I admire you for that. I'd never be able to explain how I felt quite like you can. Keep writing, love. <3