Give Me A Reason To Believe - Comments

I really enjoyed this. The plot. The characters. And I absolutely adored the amazingly vivid description. But like the members above noted, your spacing is a little confusing. But all in all, awesome job!

This is really, really cute; however, I have to agree with Sierra Kusterbeck about the spacing. Also, the font is a little too bright for my taste. I think a dark blue would work better. Anyways, con-crit out of the way. Onto the first chapter. Your imagery is very nice and so are your descriptions. I feel as if I'm there, looking in. I like how Zack seems mysterious, in a way, and how he took care of Lisa after she got majorly drunk. He's really cute :3 Anyways, this was absolutely lovely <3 Great job!

You did a good job with this. Your descriptions are really vivid, and your imagery is spot on.

Although I'm not a fan of the way that the paragraphs are spaced-- especially in the second chapter-- it was really well-written, and that's pretty much the only criticism I have.

Like I said before, you did a really good job. :]

This is quite lovely, so far. (:
I really enjoy all of the care you take in description,
it really brings out the character emotion and scenery.
Zack seems rather mysterious, in a way,
and I liked how he took care of Lisa when she was drunk.
I thought this was well written, and everything flowed nicely.
You definitely left the reader a sense of wanting more,
to know where Zack and all of his brooding thoughts just might end up.
Great job. <3