Our Broken Reality - Comments

ADORABLE, CUTE, EMOTIONALLY ATTACHING.
my god this story was so awesome, i mean I love it, wow wow wow...I read both your stories and found myself gribbed
well done, love
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Oh wow, such emotion. A tear nearly escaped my eye, you did a great job. I love how the characters are portrayed too. Anyway it was a sweet story and I think Brendan Urie is amazing in general, you did him justice.

I didn't like the layout though, I think instead of black it could be grey and a different type of pink for the story area. Feel free to ignore this part, it's just my opinion.

I found this story to be super, super adorable!
I love how cute it was throughout the whole time I read it!
You're a super good writer, I really liked this.
Keep up the great work, dear. (:

aww that's so cute :) as they say, opposites attract!
I liked how you are explaining her, it's very endearing
I think dancing is honestly so romantic <3
they really do make a cute couple
I know what they mean by the touchingthing
it isn't supposed to be taken like a dirty thing,
It just means they love each other, they like to touch, nothing wrong with that, it's cute
it's cool that they both play music too, it's probabaly something that connects them too
where does she have to go? I'm guessing it's bad though
aww I hope they can come back to each other!
the endng was slightly sad, but I loved all of this
it was amazing <33!

This was, in a nutshell, a very cute story. Sad, mysterious, flawless in the flow. There were a few times when you put things in present tense instead of past.

I like how I don't know what 'reality' is for her. Why it makes her sad, where she has to go. Brendon and her together were so very cute, and the ending tore my heart up. :( In a good way. It was so touching, so sweet -- and all together, very realistic.

Fantastic job, sweetie. I really, really enjoyed this. :D