Lost - Comments

My first thoughts on the layout were ones that told me that it was very sophisticated and gorgeous in its simplicity. :) <33

So, the summary before the story gave me chills. Just saying. Terrified the living daylights out of me, aha. It does make this story seem very nightmarish, which may have been what you were going for. Another thing I liked about the summary was that it showcased your talent as a writer amazingly. <333

The light bulb in his head was very nearly turning on as ideas and thoughts crossed his mind.

That has to be my favorite line in the entirtey of the piece.<3 It's very, very cute in an intellegent sort of way. :)

Oh moose babies. I'm sorry had to use that profanity, but that was trippy. That was incredibly trippy. I mean, I don't think how much of a trip you just sent my mind on - on how long of a loop, how curvy of a stretch!

You did an amazing job here. <3 At first, I was like, whoa, what, 2ooo words? Nah, I'll pass. But then I read, and I just couldn't get enough. That's real talent right thurr. (; <3

Nice job :)

You are gradually becoming one of my favorite authors on this site. I don't really read fanfiction and dru had to remind me who Panic at the Disco was a while back. I like this peace simply because it's not super fanfiction-y but it's mainly about nightmares and whatnot. It was just a very interesting piece, one that I kind of love. Um, I don't really know what else to say other than job well done midair.

Brendon-centric means it centers on Brendon so this is Brendon-centric. XD

I really like how there's not a lot of dialogue, but when there is it fits in perfectly with the tone. I love how Ryan knew Brendon was in his room and came to find him. I love it partly because Brendon felt silly because Ryan wasn't much older than him and it was almost like he was questioning the dynamics of their friendship, but he had it right the first time, just second-guessing himself. And I love how Ryan knew it must be nightmares and how he said it so casually and Brendon freaked, like he thought he was the only one who'd ever had nightmares.

I also liked the description of the nightmare. It wasn't overdone, which I appreciated 'cause I'm not a girl who's crazy about description.