Belle of the Boulevard - Comments

Apparently I've read this before, haha! Anyways, I like what you've done with the layout. It's much, much better :D I think I read the first chapter when I last commented, so I'll go on to the second. I really like Elle. She's sorta crazy and funny and nutty - she reminds me of a few of my friends. I like the relationship that they have; it's really funny, haha! My only con-crit this time, however, is the fact that the paragraphs aren't spaced evenly and such, and that you have a few missing commas here and there. That's basically it. Overall, I really like this story. It's cute and fun (: Lovely job!

Okay, so I'm one of those people who judges the layout before reading and I have to say that the layout made it virtually impossible to read the story. I had to click 'Default Layout' to read it. Sorry :( I suggest removing the flower background picture and just adding a colored background in a nice color. The yellow is much too bright and hurts the eyes. The stick figure pictures just distracts the reader and you can't see some of the beginning writing. Also, I suggest changing the font color to black. Just a few suggestions. Anyways, this story has major potential, but the grammar and spelling and punctuation errors might put a lot of readers off. The story itself is very interesting and illustrates a normal friendly relationship between friends. It's definitely cute, but I think you should get a Beta for this. Like I said, the story has major potential; it just needs a little polishing up. Good luck with this! <3

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I love the relationship with Aimsley and Elle, they seem very close-knit and realistic. There are a bit of grammatical errors with your tags and beats, ie. "Put a comma after this dialogue," sometimes I just see "there is no comma at the end of this dialogue" and it looks a bit juvenile? Um, otherwise, it's a pretty good story about normal teen life. Interesitng.

I like it. Please do continue (:

interesting start. I wana know what happens to the girl.