Don't Think About Jumping - Comments

I really liked this short story, I think it would make an amazinh chapter story. The spelling and grammer was excellent. The layout is cute, i like it a lot.

I like how you didn't give a lot of detail about the the characters. The story focuses on the events and the future, this is a nice twist from the usual stories I read on Mibba. The way you wrote the story was easy to follow, I pictured myself standing behind them on the cliff listening to them talk and waiting to see what would happen.

The title was really unique, it drew me in and made me want to read it.

This is one of the best short stories I have read on this site. Keep up the good work! :)

I really like this. It made me sad to see how their lives paned out. It's such a tragedy when people give up their lives. The title misleads you, sort of. I thought it would be about some teen unhappy with life trying to commit suicide and someone who cared a lot about them convincing them not to.

All in all, you really did a great job with this! If you ever decide to make a story of this, please let me know. <3

I really liked the title and summary of this piece; as soon as I looked at your collection, I was immediately drawn to this one. I was definitely not disappointed. This was a very interesting story. When I first saw the title, I thought that it was going to be about someone committing suicide but this was much more than that. I loved the references to the past and how you gave us just enough information to know what the event was but nothing else. It felt like kind of a tease, to be honest; I think you could write another story related to this if you wanted.

I think my favorite section was this: We could think about the weather. It seems like the weather is always our go to in conversation so I thought it made perfect sense that the character's mind wanted to go to that.

Overall, I really liked this piece. (:

I like the concept, it's very moving and yet real. Though I found the end too abrubt. I would've liked another sentence just to round it off a bit more.
I liked how you didn't give away too many details about the two, or really reveal their relationship. I'd guess siblings, but really they could be anything. So I liked that.

At one place though, you had one character talking in two separate paragraphs, that confused me as generally if you make a new paragraph it's a new person speaking.

And: “Yes. Yes, I remember,” and I too closed my eyes.
That sentence should come to a full stop, so there should be a period as well as "and" being capitalized.

Other than that no spelling mistakes or grammar errors I could find. I thought the layout was a bit iffy though, the link color definitely not right as it was hard to see against the background. And the background image seems a bit dodgy. But it was readable and that's what's important.

Wow, I must say that was very well written. I enjoyed reading it :) It was definitely different from all other things I have read and that made it very much worth reading. Good job :)

I wanna know what the hell they both got themselves into, and why :O
I really liked that, and I don't usually read original stories. It went really well listening to Young Heretics for some reason..
Very descriptive in the right ways and very well written :)

I kind of feel like this could be the prologue to a really awesome V for Vendetta-esque story, haha. I really, really like what you did with the prompt I gave. =) Truth be told, I'm not sure what I would have done with those words myself. But the way you wrote this has me wondering what's going on, in a good way; wanting to know more about what they're involved in and who these people are and I think it's pretty awesome. =)