This is beautiful..
February 27th, 2011 at 05:52am
I really really liked it. (: You're right about the grammar, there was a lot of mistakes;
Where it says "She was a waste of breathe" that should be "breath". Breathe is like breathing in the air. Breath is what comes out of your mouth. :P "He was thinking TO hard" should be "TOO", an extra o in there. "He watched her every moves." Move. "He heard her every stomachs growls." I would take out the s's maybe?
Anyways, great. It really went good with the photo, I think. (:
