Monsters + People - Comments

Oh, silly girly.

Okay, I'm just going to start of saying that this just... it blew me away. This was very, very well written.

I adore the layout, mostly because it's so simple and is easy to read, and because your background picture kind of ties to the story, in a way. I also love the lack of capitalization in the title of the story and in the title of the chapter. It has a certain impact on the reading experience. And from what I could see, you didn't have any grammar or spelling mistakes, which is always nice.

As for your writing style, well.... I loved it. The story flowed very well, your transitions weren't choppy, and the way you sectioned each part of the story off didn't distract from the reading. As with the lack of capitalization in the story title, the fact that you didn't name the characters left a certain impact and a nice air of mystery. I wanted to know who these people were, but at the same time, I didn't really care.

I also loved how at the beginning of the story, you brought some comedy into it with both of their costumes. I can't say that I was really surprised when she ended up sticking with the guy after finding out about his obsession, but I was surprised that she still loved him after finding out that he was molesting his niece. But I liked that element of the story - that even though he did something wrong, she still loved him.

Overall, your entry was just fantastic. You are a very talented writer, and I just loved reading this because it was so well done. I wish you the best.

Hi.
I'd just like to start off by saying thank you for getting your entry in before the deadline. I appreciate it.

I love the artist Alex Pardee so i adored your layout, it was also simple and easy to read. From what I could see you didn't have any punctuation errors or any sentences that were difficult to understand.

When I set that wish i was expecting a story about some girl loving someone she couldn't have but your story really surprised me, i thought it was a brilliant idea. I thought you really involved the secret and took it to a whole new level. I'm glad you came up with an original idea and your story has really stuck in my mind.

"He's so convincing that she almost believes him" that was my favourite line. It was really creepy and all i kept thinking was 'there is something wrong with this guy'
You're writing is beautiful, you are very talented and I hope you go far with it. Your writing was easy to read and flowed really well. They way you described everything amazed me, and I really am speechless. The fact that you didn't use names made your entry very unique.
I loved his costume for the party, i thought it brought an element of comedy into your entry which contrasted with the underlining feel of the whole story.

I was very surprised when she didn't give up on him even after finding out about his obsession and I was glad your story wasn't predictable. I adored the last line though, it was just so wrong it was fantastic. He's played such a huge role in her life that she is just unable to see the wrong in it because it's love to her, her wish to be loved has destroyed her and manipulated her thoughts on what is wrong and right.

You're entry was amazing and I really wish you the best. I loved reading it because you are very talented and you made the story easy to read, you drew me in right from the start. Well done. x

I try to leave decent length comments on all entries, but I really don't think that I can do that in this case. You've made me nearly speechless.

This was absolutely fantastic.. I've read very few stories about this subject, and this was the only only that was remotely realistic- it was also the only one that made me feel like I was there, and could feel the woman's feelings. Hell, this was more realistic and feeling-provoking than a lot of tv shows and movies that I've seen on the subject.

Why is it that every time I read something of yours, I'm left speechless?

I am judging for the contest :D
Wow, I really liked this. The guy is kinda creepy, but that just made this better because she loves him still.
It's really sad in parts, but it's still beautiful and unique. Definitely a lot better than a lot of stories I've read.
I especially love the ending, how she still loves him and sticks by him. That is soo sweet.
Please check into the contest soon to see the winners!

I enjoyed reading this lots and it was awesome and very unique...It defiantely has alot of potential in the contest to score high(:

I'm going to state the obvious saying you're an exceptional writer. I adored this story, it was beautifully written and heartbreaking.

Your writing is astonishingly beautiful. Honestly, this site needs more writers like you. This was amazing.