Phantoms - Comments

I like the wording and the way is written. (Lol I don't know if they're the same thing XD)
I love the emotion of it but how simple it is at the same time.
It makes it really easy to relate and just apply what ever situation someone might be going through.
I think that's part of what makes great writting when the writer writes in such a unique way that the reader can not only understand it's meaning but finds it easy to add their own meaning to it too.

Wow! It's so simple. So beautiful! I absolutely adore this. I didn't even notice the layout and I didn't care which I think is one of the best compliments I can possibly give you. All that I was focused on was the writing. You write so simply and yet there is an elegance to it. I have to agree with Ava. I love the link about poisoning the lungs. It just makes you pause for a moment before you can even considering going on. But what I loved most was the whole idea of still taking that person that because I know what those emotions are like. I did that with my biological dad for a long time honestly and so I know it so well.

I don't like the grey page very much. It doesn't seem to really match with the banner. Feel free to ignore me, however, I'm just incredibly OCD about my matching, ahha. <3

Am I poisoning your lungs?

I really liked that line.

Another thing I liked is how almost every line immediately contradicted itself with another one. Harsh line, tender line. It was a nice balance. Labeling it as sick kind of synched the piece together.

I think you did a nice job.<33