Golden Thread - Comments

Lovely story. I like the plot and I can't wait to hear more. There are errors in your writing. I'm just suggest you read over each chapter before it is posted.

wonderful things happen in the bathroom...o my that didn't sound right lol :D well anywho Thx for the update this is awesome!

Haha, epic. Love how the girl she's talking to in the bathroom just happens to have the solution :)

Wow this is awesome!!! I've always liked part of your world XD
Update!!! :)

Aaaah, you like Under the Sea, huh? I always liked Kiss the Girl. Haha. :) But of course you saw that in my earlier comment.

Disney freaks are so fun!!! My homecoming theme for this next school year is actually Disney, which is an EPIC theme for my senior year if I do say so myself :) But our Marching Band is doing Phantom of the Opera, which is also epic...:)

Anywho, I still really love this! I didn't find any mistakes that grabbed on and shouted at me to tell you, so this random babble will end here with OMG I LOVE THIS!! Addicted :)

Until next time!! :)

I do still like it! I just got 'round to reading it a little late.

Where they're at lunch and talking about what to get, btw, you have "chooses" when they should be looking at the "choices".
And at the very end, with "I hope you catch Chlamydia." you forgot the period and the closing quotes. Otherwise, still love it!

I can't wait for more :)

Well, I think I'll still like this XD

Is it good that I don't really remember the original version, so I won't get them confused...? (oops...)

Anywho, there's one point, in like the fourth line or something, where I think you meant to say, "and I'M his Cinderella" but you said "and HIM Cinderella". Lol :)

Anyway, I'm sure I will absolutely LOVE it :)

Okay, dear...um, I have a lot of little errors. Nothing too big, just using the wrong words or something. Simple errors to make, but sometimes noticable.

Paragraph 1:
“It is a simple four letter word yet, nothing about it is simple.”
---I’d put the comma before “yet”, not after.

Again in the next two sentences, same as the above.

“Some people find it amusing to toe with hearts they didn’t own…”
---should “toe” be “toy”?

Paragraph 11 (not counting single-sentence paragraphs):

“…she grabbed the neatly folded pile beside her and throw it in my direction.”
---”throw” should be “threw”

Paragraph 13:

."You should have returned then to your dresser anyway, you lazy ass."
---”then” to “them” ?

Paragraph 14:

“I stuck my tongue at her childishly before angrily stumping back in the fairly lit bathroom…”
---”stumping” to “stomping”, perhaps?

Paragraph 34 (I think):

"He's going to think I'm stocking him. I just know it!"
---wrong “stocking”. I think you want “stalking” J

LAST Paragraph:

You put “Arial” and it’s really “Ariel”. And I vote “Kiss The Girl” has the more catchy tune (there’s another thing - you put “tone” instead of “tune”. Though it works either way, I guess).

SORRY for the loooong list, and aside from that, I absolutely loved it! Now you just need to update some more :)

This story=love and updates=LOVE and this story + updates = MEGALOVE!!! :)
Can't wait to see what's next :)

Hon, I love thsi sooooo much!!!....but you didn't need to tell ME, an avid Lord of the Rings freak, that the Aragorn you were mentioning was one and the same from the one I'm effing in love with XD

So, anyway...he's a jerk. So, yeah. Where's the possible good person for her that comes in going to come in at? Because I've already had enough of the cheating jerk. and it's only been one chapter of cheating jerk, plus the introduction. :)

Anywho, lov e this story. It might not ever beat out Magic, in my opinion, but I love it nonetheless:)

Love this! Keep it up! =D

I agree - please try updating more than once a month? - but I already love you forever anyway for Magic :)

Anywho...I really think this one's goign to be good. The whole "What if..." sequence reminds me of Ever After, when Henry is all, "And what if there are two people, and they're walking side by side, and you just HAPPEN to meet the first one first? Is she the one you're meant to be with, or was it the other? And does everything happen for a reason or is it all just left to chance?" or something along those lines. It makes me giggle when he's "all in a dither" as some might say. Hehe. :)

Happy early birthday, then, and I can't wait for more of this! I love it already :)

I love the idea for this ! Please try updating more then once a month and I will love you forever ? :D