Although I don't want to start my comment on a slightly negative note, I did notice something strange right from the beginning. The sentences seemed to be a little too long; although I too use a lot of run-on sentences, it felt like some of them could have been easier to read if they were split up into a few. (: Besides that, I really liked this chapter. You do a very, very good job of writing sensual Mikey and we all know how much I love Mikey. xD Now I'm off to go read For The Monsters... (:
March 22nd, 2011 at 09:29pm