The Logic of Alice - Comments

This is really pretty.

Awh, Katie, this was amazing.

SEEDLINGS. :)

Anyway, the imagery and the words are lovely. Absolutley divine.

I love your word phrasing. It really was good, at first I was skeptical because of the lack of words, but I believe you said more in less than a hundred words than most do in a thousand. I really loved it.

"My mother’s logic, my father’s logic, is upside down and turned around. It spat back at me, backwards down here."
Did you come stalk me? Cuz that's my life.
Course at this moment in time it is all going down the proverbial rabbit hole, so maybe it's just my imagination. :)

Interesting beginning. I'm assuming this is an Alice fanfiction and you've definitely got Lewis Carroll down. I can see the Wonderland aspect of this as well as imagine her falling down the rabbit hole. I'm curious as to what exactly you'll do with this piece--how you will differ it from the actual story.

This was, indeed, quite poetic. It at times seemed jumbled and confused and it has anything but order to it, but that's the beauty of it. It fits well with the Alice in Wonderland theme, the confusion and poetic sense, the undeniable beauty to the words. You've done wonders to it and it's probably one of the better Alice drabbles I've read in a long time, if ever. Good job, really.

But I do think it could be even more magnificent if it were just a bit longer, or even continued on. I'm sorry I don't have much more to say, it's just so short it's hard to find a lot to talk about with it that I haven't already said.

I absolutely adore the feeling I get when reading this; the words seem so simple, but they provide this extraordinary illusion of chaos and falling down the rabbit hole. Very poetic, very lovely. :) You have wonderful talent!

Oh, is this a chaptered story? I really hope so. The layout was so cute and magical. I loved the title too. It really fit. I think this would work well as a drabble also if it's not chaptered. Your writing style was so poetic. It kind of sounded like it would be something that she'd be thinking whilst falling down the rabbit hole. Great job!

That was like... pretty. Seriously. It just sounded really good. Poetic, I guess? I'm confused, but that could very well be me as a reader. But it's also a good thing. I'm not sure what's happening, but it drew me in already. I like it. I would definitely be interested in reading more and learning more about the story. If nothing else, I'd love to just read more of your words, if that makes any sense.

The layout is also very pretty. I adore the banner. It's one of those simple, yet appealing ones.

Very poetic and detailed..i wanna see where this story goes...keep writing and i'm going to subscribe:)

I like the banner. It looks almost painted, and the blue really compliments it. It’s really nice :)

Okay, I love the structure of the first little chunk of down, down, down and how they’re centered. It makes me feel like I’m in the rabbit hole, falling faster and faster and it’s a really cool illusion.

My mother’s logic, my father’s logic, is upside down and turned around. It spat back at me, backwards down here.
Ugh. That’s amazing. Seriously. It’s pretty brilliant and just, it really makes you think. I love personification, maybe a little too much, and this is just beautiful. <3

I like the descriptions and how you presented them. You showed me what was happening, instead of telling me. I’m not sure if you’ve heard of that concept, so pretty much, you went really in depth and embraced the words to let me enter the world of this drabble. You didn’t just put me outside a picture, you made me into the movie. It’s awesome.

Your style is really sweet. I’m actually pretty jealous of how simple and quaint it is, but cryptic and interesting at the same time. It’s really something that I like and I’m excited to hear more of it!

Short, sweet and to the point. I couldn't help but picture the Mad Hatter dancing while I read this; that and Alice falling down the rabbit hole. So much detail in such a small amount of words, very nice indeed. I do believe I will be subscribing to this one.

I find myself wanting to leave this huge, huge comment because this most definitley deserves it, but I fear you've taken my breath away with this. No words come to mind other than absolutely lovely and amazing. I like your detail and I like the beat this has. It's very Alice-esque. :)

I cannot wait to see what comes next.<333

This seems sort of poetic, in a way. Without the rhyming.
I really like your layout, it gives the whole mood and really benifits the story, which, by the way is surprisingly short.You don't go off spinning details we don't need and that's rather refreshing. Your writing is great, no errors, and you pull the whole Alice theme well. (:

This is definitley a story to watch, and I will be doing so.

This is amazing. Like srs bsns.

First of all, the layout is stunning. The colours are gorgeous and the banner is really lovely. It makes a change to see a drawn banner rather than photographs, and it's awesome!

I really love your style. You obviously choose your words so carefully, as I could see everything that was going on in that moment, feel everything Alice was feeling, and all in 96 words? That shows some real skill as writer, and you pull it off fantastically. Your vocabulary is perfect - a mix of almost "old fashioned" words such as rationale and nonsene with the very modern stuff. it reflects the jumble of her emotions at the time and the blend is perfect.

I also like the uncertainty of the drabble. I'm unsure at the moment as to whether what's happening to your Alice is literal or metaphorical. On one hand, she could actually be falling down the rabbit hole to Wonderland, but on the other hand she might be using the idea as an allegory to what's going on in her life. You never explictly say either and it's intriguing.

I really cannot wait to read more to see which you've used, and to see where you take this!

The layout is really cute! I love it. It was really short, so I can't give much feedback yet. I like the way it is worded, because it is simple. I also like it because it doesn't really give away much of what is going to happen from here, so it's like a cliffhanger. There were no mistakes that I took notice to, which is good. I can't wait to read more, so I'll definitely subscribe to this.

This isn't for a comment swap since I have no stories.

This is cute so far(the little freckles are adorable!) and I like your way with words, hon.<3

I love this layout so much!
the girl really looks like how I picture Alice
I really liked this!
It's short so I can't give a big comment like I'd like to give you,
but I'll try!
I like her thinking as she goes down the hole.
no other story does that, usually it's just her screaming,
so I like thatl ittle insight a lot :)
overall, just a good story :)

This is madness! Ha, just kidding. I really like this in all of its simplicity. It got me confused, and then un-confused, and then confused again. I guess that's a good thing since Alice in Wonderland did that to me too. I don’t know where to turn from here, for anywhere I go from here is to far from what I’ve seen. Here, it should be: I don't know where to turn from here, for anywhere I go from here is too far from what I've seen. By the way, I really like that line (:

Oh my! I have to say that, first of all, I do love the layout. It's cute and so Alice-ish :D And I absolutely looove the way you wrote this - it's clean and precise, but had an edge of confusion in there, which adds to the Alice in Wonderland mood. I love how you ended it, most of all. It ties everything together with a cute little red-- er, blue, I should say, bow :D This was amazing, doll <3