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I have to unsex myself.

this line caught my eye. mostly because of how many meanings it can have. there's unsex - undoing being a girl because of all the burden it carried in that time, but there's also unsex as in, taking out sexuality altogether. she isn't a girl but since she isn't a boy either, the burden doubles, and calls for more strength than usual.

the whole thing is interesting to me because as many times as i watched mulan, i never really taught too deeply about it, about what other agendas she had or thoughts that were going through her head. the second bit especially. like, about her decorated father falling under a lesser general, or her being more fit for battle, despite being a girl, simply because her father can't even surpass the training.

as it progressed i didn't even process what she was about to do. it just didn't come to me, despite the tiny hints you gave. that only made the effect more horrifying though.

The cut on my cheek, this is my wedding night. I am losing my virginity to something greater than any mortal man could provide.

virginity, in this context, doesn't even mean sex - but a loss of innocence, of childhood, of finally taking things into your own hands and fending for yourself in the world. brilliant.

and. gah. that bit. it reminds me of the arm-cutting scene in 127 hours. you do what you have to do.

but at the same time, hey. at least she won't get exposed when shang walks in on her in the tent anymore xD

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This is so lovely. It's potent, interesting and your descriptions don't fall short of the image they portray. Really, I wish I had more to say, but this is just so nice.

Wow. Okay, so I love the description and all the tiny details of how she was feeling about herself, how she wanted to be honorable. You are a great writer and like I said in my last comment on your story Gallus, you are a flawless writer and have left me with nothing to criticise :)
Keep up the good work
- Jay

I'm clawing at my neck right now. Your descriptions are shocking, but I can't keep my eyes off from the lines and the letters.

This is amazingly written, the obvious frustration of Mulan, of her want to bring honor to her family without belonging to a man in order for her parents to feel proud. And those descriptions keep coming at me; one thing is your hair, but her breasts, and how determined she is. god.

Ow... cutting your own breasts off..... that would HURT.