Right to Choose - Comments

I love this story! i like how you dont quite tell everything about her :)

That was beautiful! I hope lexi changes her mind!!!!!

I have never been a femme slash reader so I was surprised when I found my self enjoying this. Its a good idea and you have wrote the characters emotions amazingly. There a few spelling mistakes here and there but other than that its fab!
Keep up the good work :D

This is realy good!!! u need 2 update!!!!!!!!!! if u do ill love u 4ever!

I've never read a femme-slash before, and find that what you've written to be quite interesting. I was up until midnight trying to finish all the chapters that you've already posted, and didn't stop reading until I was. You've done a great job creating the characters, especially for Cass who I feel so awful for. Her character is quite solid, and is what I would imagine a headstrong girl with a neglectful mother to be like: mischievous, but at the same time a bit insecure and scared. I also greatly despised Reegan, and hope that you'll give him what he deserves sooner or later.

I've noticed a few spelling mistakes here and there, but they didn't really take away from the actual plot. Like tnd437 said, you should probably add in a few more details, or mention who is speaking a bit more because at time I'd get confuse. (≧ω≦)

Nevertheless, great job on writing this.

So yeah I totally forgot I was planning on reading your story :/ glad I got a comment from you so that I remembered :) I really like this so far. Did you start it in 2010??! Haha I hope you do update more often than that :) I'm not sure why, but cigarette smoking in stories is always a plus for me. It's so picturesque. And I like how you're using dates, too. I know I'm fairly new here, but I haven't seen anyone else do that yet.

Your story is something, actually, that I’m not too used to reading. I am a sci-fi/fantasy freak. I actually just read a, what I’d call, “normal” story today, nonfiction. This is another nonfiction. Though, they aren’t all bad just because there’s no magic or unexplainable happenings in them.

I really liked how you set up the frame in the prologue. With the smoking. I’m not a smoker, but I am close to someone who is. And I’ve skimmed a couple stories that mention smoking. I think you described that beautifully.

As for the rest of the story, I felt like it might have been lacking in detail. There was plenty of flowing dialogue, but not much description as to what the characters were doing.

The part with the cops seemed very interesting. I want to know why Cass had to go with them

Cass seems like a rough character. Was her mother an abuser? That’s what I’m guessing from the little I’ve read so far.

Are Cass and Lex friends or more than friends?

This story, so far, kinda makes me think of young delinquents, or something. Running amuck at the school and such. I’ve watched movies like that.

I think the interactions between Cass and Evans are cute. :)

You have an interesting story so far!

I really like the way it was written, 'cause you know some books have superb plots and terrible writing? and vice-versa? well i can tell, this story isn't either! Keep going, girl!

Holy cow girl this is superb! I started with one chapter and then I just had to keep going! What I love was how it developed. Its like each chapter was edging you on your seat this was fabulous to read amazing work.

SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO good this is amazing!!!!!!!!!! please keep updating

This was just...beautiful to me in away. The way you described the cigarette was amazing, the imagery was so talented. I really like how it has a mystery to it, it was transparent for a moment then it blurred over again.

I f*cking love that. In all seriousness.

I also love how you made the Cassandra character come to life. She's not just there, she is THERE. A person with thoughts and feelings. A human. The way the story was set up was great too. How everything just pieced together just perfectly.

Honestly I don't give a damn about the layout. It doesn't make a story to me. Your story was so good it could be on black background with white words for all I care. I would still focus perfectly on the words. Everyone is different I guess.

I'm going to subscribe, recommend and wait for this art to keep going:) Absolutely love it in every way. I would not change a thing.

I like this :) It's got great imagery
can't wait to read <3

Hmmm, I think I adore your new writing style.
Update?
Or fuck me? Whichever... ;)

"Her pale, slender fingers shone with an unearthly, almost fluorescent light in the artificial glow from the service station she was sitting close to."

I love this opening. It's great, eerie imagery. Your descriptions are just great- not too verbose, but very effective. I'm impressed.

Also- you use semi-colons correctly! Squee!!! You do pretty much everything correctly, actually. The only real error I picked was this:

"extinguishing it’s small flame" Should be 'its'. Slip of the keyboard, probably, since you seem to have good skills generally.

I would actually be interested in reading the rest of it when it goes up, if you can poke me on my profile or something.

I like the way its written. Its not really the kind of stories that I normally read but this is an exception.

A strong yet short start to leave a reader thirsting for more, no? There isn't much yet to comment on but it gave something to look forward to; so many questions already and yet the answers stray from us like a child wanting to explore the big wide world. You're good at being vague, that's certain.

Two errors. One:

“I wish you wouldn’t,” a quite voice rang out as she lifted the cigarette back to her lips. Quite should be changed to quiet.

And the other one, in the last sentence I believe, should be its instead of it's.

Waiting for more.

I like the title of this,
but the layout I didn't like so much :/
I really don't like premade layouts, so it's probably just me x)
i love your details, and how you went really in depth with them
it gave you a clear picture of her surroundings,
and what she looked like exactlly
I genuinly really liked the first chapter
i thought it gave a mysteriuos feel,
and I'm not sure exactlly what is going to happen
really liked it though :D

Interesting first chapter. Doesn't give out much (pfft, more like anything) yet is interesting in what happened and why. c: Subscribed.