If Only He Knew - Comments

This is delicious I love it I want more its amazing.

I think you should update more often:)

Awww! HE PROPOSED!!!
but I still feel a bit sad for Amanda. I think her and James should get together. Or maybe she tries to hit on Cam or something. I love this story!

Okay.
So.
I think this is really cute.
And adorable.
And amazing. :]
BUT.
I've got a few... bothers. :x
...
I'm sorry. I am a very fickle person, and I tend to point things out that either offend people, make them mad or whatnot. But I just have to say it... because that's the way I just am.
Anyways.
So if you don't take criticism lightly, just completely and utterly skip this comment. Because I don't want to offend you and have you hate me for the rest of your life.
So, there's a couple grammatical and spelling errors in the story, and a few of the verb tenses sometimes get mixed up. Maybe try to proofread your chapter before you post it. Go over it a couple times instead of just hurriedly throwing stuff out there because readers demand it. Remember. You're the author, it's your final say in when you post the new chapter. (I'm a total grammar Nazi and anything bugs me. T.T Sorry.)
Uhm... what else... oh, things move a bit fast, so if you slow down, I'm sure this story will blossom.
Anyways.
Like I said. I'm fickle.
I don't mean to be, but I just am.
You don't really have to fix anything if you don't want to.
It's not like I'm going to stop reading if you don't.

In anycase.
Overall, I do enjoy the story.
It has a cute plot line. <3

Geezus fuck.
I FINALLY FOUND AN AA SLASH WITH BEN/CAM.
I haven't even read it yet.
Hahahaha.
Anyways.
I just wanted you to know, that I've been looking for one of these for forever,
considering it's no fun reading your own writing,
so I never wrote one myself.
But geezus fuck.
<3
I'mma go read now.

Aw, poor Sam :(

I liked it, but It would be awesome if like, you showed how amanda feels. Like have her in a chapter.

I feel like a perv saying this, but who cares: I LOVE THIS STORY!!! please update, like, soon *subscribes*

Yyayyayaayy <3 i sure hope you update soon , i really like your story . your a great writer <3

Fist to comment , hell yes (;
this was realllyy good.. write more?