I was just about to go find another story to read when I saw that you asked for no silent readers and I feel like comments on stories should help a writer become a better writer. So my advice you to help you become a better writer is proof read there were a few tiny mistakes that many people would not notice one example is in the first paragraph "I would not choose “loyal” like Lindsey Wilson, who I had personally watched lie straight her boyfriend’s face as he died from a bullet wound to the chest the very next day." in this sentence you forgot the word to.... Thank you for the wonderful story