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March 8th, 2011 at 11:48am
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‘his cheekbones would have made a Greek statue weep in envy’ – I really liked this sentence.
Great creation of tension.
Noticed the odd typo
Oh, I’m starting to really get into this, keep up the good work.
March 5th, 2011 at 03:52pm
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Hmmm, now the text is a little small…
‘“Well then I guess I imagined eating red velvet cake with vanilla butter crème frosting earlier huh?”’ – this made me grin, as did the last bit of french from Alice.
Awww, poor Alice
Good luck with your fan-fics
BTW, it’s spelt ‘tongue’
I like Alice’s personality once she’s grown up.
February 26th, 2011 at 04:01pm
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I agree with Weezze, the layout is not the best.
But I like the story :]
Good start. Update?
February 24th, 2011 at 05:14am
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Not a fan of the layout but it’s the writing that counts and the writing is good.
I spotted the odd mistake but nothing major, perhaps you just need to read through it.
‘Her mind feels like jell- o. Not quite easy to mold but not too hard to penetrate’ – I liked this description, it was a little unusual.
Intriguing first chapter, can’t wait for the rest.
February 24th, 2011 at 04:19am
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