A New Life - Comments

A story description is meant to go in the summary not in a chapter. That's why it's called a summary--summary means short description of story. Also, the dialogue on here is really immature and unprofessional. Words like "UGH!" should never be used in a story you should say something like "she groaned" etc. But you should know that by now, you're twenty.

Description/Prologue

The word "she" is a bit repetitive and I would have written it as one paragraph except for the last two sentences. It gives enough about Amanda's character to go on and leaves enough room for the imagination with the life changing part. Also, her self should be herself and every day should be everyday.

One

Okay, overall it was nicely written but there were a few mistakes with grammar and fragmented sentences.

I woke up to the dogs barking. Then the doorbell rang.

That would have sounded better if you combined the sentences like this: I woke up to the sound of the dogs barking and the doorbell ringing.

After Amanda tells the dogs to shut up "quite" should be "quiet"

When she's talking to Harry "My" should be "my" after the comma and the same thing goes for you. "You" should be "you".

That's pretty much it and it's a great start.

For some reason, this prologue seemed more like a summery to me. As I was reading it, I felt that you were just summarizing what happened before the story begins. I really like the idea of the prologue - I think it is really unique - but I think that it could be expanded a little bit. Maybe put description into the story to make it more like a prologue than a summery. Also, I found a couple of capitalization mistakes that can be easily fixed. Overall, this idea is really interesting.

It sounds more like a story description than an actual prologue. The main use for prologues are to give an introduction. Not a full overview as to what is going to happen. That's what story descriptions are more or less for.
Also some capitalization is needed.
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