December 5th, 2012 at 12:51am
So I finally read through the whole thing! I promise to start reading the sequel on a later date as I'd like to check out some other stories as well. I agree with the comment below that this story could use some construction, but don't be put off! Every writer makes a mistake, heck, I once found a mistake in the Twilight book which is very popular so ya' know. Anyway I'm babbling, sorry, all together I thought the plot was really good! And the charactets personalities were made very clear through out the whole thing, which is always a good thing :)
Keep writing and good luck
Thank you for reading my story :)