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  • fifthghost

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    It's funny, I was kind of picturing it as Callakarth with Zack being the one with the crush because I feel like Zack is usually the one on the outside looking in, when something's one-sided. But when I got to your author's note at the end, I kind of liked that it was the other way around. Still, fics like this really make my chest tight from how sad they make me. Poor Alex!
    April 23rd, 2017 at 08:47pm
  • PeanutLily

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    Awww
    you should make this like a short chaptered story. c:
    Like only 4 or 5 chapters..
    It's too short ;-; But it's a good short c:
    Very nice and sad and aLEX nO ;A;
    September 6th, 2013 at 12:22am
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    aww alex :( poor boy. this was so amazing
    March 26th, 2013 at 07:33pm
  • JessLoui

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    really love this story...have you considered turning it into a multi chapter story??
    October 5th, 2011 at 05:09pm
  • prettyxinxyourxpain

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    God... such a heart breaking story... I loved it. You're such a talented writer.
    April 16th, 2011 at 09:52pm
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    I really liked how you used first person even though it's not your usual, it really made it more of a personal-feeling story and captured the emotion wonderfully. I also really like how you used the quote and how it blended perfectly into the story.
    So yeah. This was great. :3
    March 6th, 2011 at 02:30pm
  • No Tomorrow

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    Oh wow.
    I just really wanted to give Alex a hug the whole way through!
    You really captured the emotion well =]
    amazing!
    February 26th, 2011 at 12:12pm
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    OMG I JUST OMG :'( poor lexi this was AMAZIN I LOV IT XXX
    February 26th, 2011 at 09:49am
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    Shit....
    This was amazing. I love how you wrote it like it was Alex's perspective... I picked up on it being him instantly somehow.
    I'm seriously almost crying here. I feel so bad for Alex. Oh my god, it was amazing though. I just want to keep reading it over and over again. :)
    February 26th, 2011 at 04:47am
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    aww. :( that was lovely. and i like the perspective; i wrote in that perspective once too, hahah. but yeah. it doesn't work well with some stories, but it worked perfectly here. x] great job! :3 and good luck in the contest! :D
    February 26th, 2011 at 02:36am
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    **terribly sad. I did NOT think it was terrible.
    /fail.
    February 26th, 2011 at 02:15am
  • heyJAYhey

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    I really loved this =] It was terrible sad, but I loved the ambiguity that you used. In the beginning I thought it was maybe Alex looking at Zack, and then I thought maybe Zack going for Alex, but by the end I knew it was the first one.
    It was a great read :D Definitely something you should think about putting into a full story.
    February 26th, 2011 at 02:14am
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