Outside of You - Comments

It's funny, I was kind of picturing it as Callakarth with Zack being the one with the crush because I feel like Zack is usually the one on the outside looking in, when something's one-sided. But when I got to your author's note at the end, I kind of liked that it was the other way around. Still, fics like this really make my chest tight from how sad they make me. Poor Alex!

Awww
you should make this like a short chaptered story. c:
Like only 4 or 5 chapters..
It's too short ;-; But it's a good short c:
Very nice and sad and aLEX nO ;A;

aww alex :( poor boy. this was so amazing

really love this story...have you considered turning it into a multi chapter story??

God... such a heart breaking story... I loved it. You're such a talented writer.

I really liked how you used first person even though it's not your usual, it really made it more of a personal-feeling story and captured the emotion wonderfully. I also really like how you used the quote and how it blended perfectly into the story.
So yeah. This was great. :3

Oh wow.
I just really wanted to give Alex a hug the whole way through!
You really captured the emotion well =]
amazing!

OMG I JUST OMG :'( poor lexi this was AMAZIN I LOV IT XXX

Shit....
This was amazing. I love how you wrote it like it was Alex's perspective... I picked up on it being him instantly somehow.
I'm seriously almost crying here. I feel so bad for Alex. Oh my god, it was amazing though. I just want to keep reading it over and over again. :)

aww. :( that was lovely. and i like the perspective; i wrote in that perspective once too, hahah. but yeah. it doesn't work well with some stories, but it worked perfectly here. x] great job! :3 and good luck in the contest! :D

**terribly sad. I did NOT think it was terrible.
/fail.

I really loved this =] It was terrible sad, but I loved the ambiguity that you used. In the beginning I thought it was maybe Alex looking at Zack, and then I thought maybe Zack going for Alex, but by the end I knew it was the first one.
It was a great read :D Definitely something you should think about putting into a full story.