Breathing Has Got Too Hard - Comments

I love this story, so much. :) You should for sure update.

i love the story x) Ben is awesome!! and Danny is awesome!! haha and i love AskingAlexandria! Update soon

I like Danny. I really do. He makes me giggle. Especially asking Ben to remind him to steal Ben's guitar. I kept thinking: It's me and my friends, at that moment. I think you're doing really well with developing this. It's very enjoyable to read.

I'm guessing this is a fanfic, but since I don't know who Ben Bruce is, I'm reading it as original fiction. XD
I like the layout and the summary. They both fit very well with the story. The layout isn't too dark to read and everything is set up well. As for the story, I really like how you tackled the depression issue. It didn't seem stereotypical, and I like that you showed how his behavior effects his mother. I'm excited about him meeting Danny, it seems like just the thing he needs to help him get better. Your choice of language is perfect for the setting and the story type, and you handled the MSN conversation very well. Good job! :D

love it as always
this chapter made me smile

I'm in love with this <3
Keep writing, pweeeseeee pwwwesseeee pweeeseee :3

awesome chapter!!!
i already like this Danny kiddo :)
baha and that sentence was my fave: 'That Suicide silence song nearly blasted me out my seat, that’s the way to introduce yourself!' xD

Eheheh thank you so much! I'm literally beaming, i'm flattered, thank you :)

Title && Summary || I really like both. The title just kind of draws you in and then the summary is very simple and easy to go along with which is really nice to see.

Layout || Unfotunately, it's a little dull in my opinion, but it's readable which is the most important thing.

Chapter One || I really liked how you introduced Ben. And I like how you're developing him too. There was one line in particular that just struck me. I was so selfish that I didn’t care what effect I was having on other people. I thought it was amazing. So many characters when they are like that won't admit that they are being selfish and that he did just made me love him.

Chapter Two || I love the details that you give. Just these little things that a person does that you wouldn't really think to add in and mention. It's nice to see them though because it reminds you that this person isn't just meant to be a character he's supposed to be real. Anodhter line that really points that out that I liked was I half blamed him for the reason I didn‘t have any friends left, but yet I also half blamed myself for letting them all go. I didn’t even know why I bothered looking, it wasn’t like I was going to talk to anybody on it. It reminded me of me honestly. And I would have to disagree with your author's note. I really liked this particular chapter. It's something that I cand understand really well and connect with which is really important with readers.

Chapter Three || I loved every word of chapter three. I really did. I am liking how you are developing this story. I wasn't sure what I was going to think at first when I started reading all of it, but chapter three definitely solidifed my decision that I need to sub to this story. You've got something really great goind and your characters are so real that I hope that you keep to it.

i love it cant wait for more =D

I'm flattered! Thank you very much :) i should update tomorrow i think x

love it, its original.
updates soon :D

its so original! u're writing is amazing!
updates soon *-*

Love love love. :)
Poor Ben though :(