Blood of Innocents - Comments

Ohh my bad. I can't be farqued fixing it though.
I see, I see. Smexy. XD
Aye, he's buff. Ish. For now. Like Tony, in a way. Uber plot twist! Though it's really lame.

There was meant to be a comma there...
Buff?! Funny. PLOT TWIST XD
this is starting to be a bit like oliver nocturne a vampire with a prophecy.

MISTAKE: You had stake in a paragraph and then steak in the next sentence

Forever lover what? o.0
Convenient to type, too, and much faster.
It'll change a LOT over the next couple chapters. Sven reveals more of himself to her (Because he's hiding his emotions mostly, 'cause he's buff. XD) and she becomes more open to him and nobody else. And there's a huge plot twist later.^^

Hmm, maybe forever lover, as long as forever lasts. ;]
Was shorter, which was convenient.
She chooses the vampire choice, i keep thinking its so much like DS because im rereading it

R&R=Read and Review
Agreed. Chapter two will be much shorter (Hopefully).
And it was you Claire! You gave me the name for her!!
Indeed. It'll change a lot over the course of the story, if all goes to plan.
Are you going to call me lover forever? XD
~Kris

^^ R&R?Keep it definitely! Chapters should be a little shorter.

Very Darren Shan, i like ;)

see ya lover, ~Max~

Oh? So you did... One of you mentioned Alice. -.-

I didn't give you HER name i gave you Sven's name!!

A wee bit, yeah. After the first chapter it's nothing like it, though. I had it similar by accident -I was re-reading the series when I came up with the idea.

And yes, you are amazing.^^

Got that right! I am so amazing aren't i?
Is it just me or does this sound a wee bit like Darren Shan?