So, Two Guys Walk Into a Bar... And Fall in Love - Comments

(I finished chapter 11) All the emotions... They are consuming me... :O
Personally, I think Zara would be interesting. Like, if she and Rupert start dating, it could bring out some jealously in Kaden? And it may spark the chain of events that may lead to what we all want. :) If that makes any sense...

(finished chapter seven) *squealing* Rupert pecked Kaden!!!
And you seriously wrote those?? I was going to go look up the band so I could listen to it!!! So good!! :D

I just read most of chapter 5, and omg, I'm dying. Like, what the heck is a moo-moo? And Mrs. Potts was bat sh*t crazy! I am laughing so hard right now!! XD

omg i love this please update it?? I like the little kisses Kaden gets from Rupert. I thin Ryder should get some action too. and I think Zara should be a friend. I also think that Rupert should realise that he is gay and get jealous around Ryder and Kaden!

Keep! And no zara, just more boy time so they can fall in love! Though a jealous kaiden is cute haha

Ah this story is amazing I must say ((: I just wish Rubert would like Kaden back >.> Psh.

Keep and carry on! I realy do love this story :)

Keeeeepppp

I LOVE this, you should upate more. This story gave me the song little lion man witch now have over 3000 listen's on my itumes cuz it is just that awsom. Can the guys get together soon, I'mm all for taking ti slow but about now i think it's time the feelings got intense and maybe he gives him a kiss in an embarasing situation without realy knowing why? PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Keep! OMFG KEEP! Love this! I would be smiling like a dork and my mom would be all like why are you smiling? XD

It's kind of late and my mind is drooling all over itself, so I'm sorry in advance for the lack of organization in my comment but I'll do my best. First, I love your writing style. You spelled most everything correctly and very few grammatical errors that I could see. I like the titles of each chapter, and I usually hate song-based titles, but these aren't as obvious, I think. I love your characters and the fact that you started the story with the emotional intensity you did without making them leap into something really serious right away. I like the little bits of humor, too. It takes away from the heaviness of the drama. Lastly, the layout is really cute. The colors are light and playful, which goes with the picture. The story is not my thing, but I think you have a lovely writing style and I'd love to read more of your stuff in the future.

I'm not really one for slash, because they're overrated and overdone, but this one... I like this one. It's not a fanfic, finally. It's original, and that's great. The characters are very well developed, and I really enjoy your writing style. The only thing I suggest?

Change the summary page, the questions are not needed, but you can make it more gooey or ominous without having the questions. Other than that, the story is really, really, really great! Keep it up!

The lay out is pretty good and the guy in the picture looks like one of my gay friends! hahaha. This usually is not the type of story I would read I have a hard time getting into the guy love stuff because every body writes about it, the first time I ever read a story about it I found quite interesting because I had never seen anything like it before but now it's what every one writes about. But it also doesn't seem like you typical boy on boy love story which is good. Your chapters are a fairly decent length and paragraphs are a good size. Good job and have a wonderful day!

Agreeing with the comment under me your dialogue is a bit scattered but that can always be fixed. I can tell that you've put a lot of effort into your layout. Your story is very descriptive and I enjoyed reading it.

You have some grammar problems regarding your dialogue, which generally, isn't supposed to be in the middle of them :D Each time you start a new piece of dialogue, it should be a new paragraph, unless, it's the same speaker.

I'm not sure if I like the grey/yellow/purple theme you have going. I think the yellow is too bright for the purple. However, the storys really good so far :D Good luck on future writings.

That was just too sweet ^.^ aww
Haha, retail therapy is the best~ hahaha :D

aww so sweat and that mumford and son's song is now my fav ever!!!

STILL LOVES

I love this story!!! ugh, its amazing!!! update sooooooon!!!! heehee.....And Kaden better forgive Rupert :(

It cute for sure, but I found myself unable to continue it. There was just too much information given at once in chapter 2 that I got confused and couldn't keep up.