Watch Me Burn - Comments

I love the layout. I'm a layout freak, and I believe that most stories are even better if they have a good layout.*

Sorry about that.

I love the layout. I'm a layout freak, and I believe that most stories are even better if they have a good layout.*

Sorry about that.

I love the layout. I'm a layout freak, and I believe that most stories are even better if they have a good story.

The lyrics set the scene and emotion really well, and gave a heartbroken feeling to it.

I really liked the description in this story, it really painted the emotions well and the lack of dialog made it more dramatic and interesting.

Overall, I loved it. (:

I really really like the opening of this. First of all, the layout is incredibly neat and organized. On top of it all, there's a pretty picture to look at too. :) Veryy nice. Secondly, I love the song this seems to pertain to or refrence. C: It's really, really good. <33
I cannot wait to see where this goes but I know it'll be amazing because let's face it - you're writing it!(: <33

1/3

The detail in this chapter was very, very nice. Not nice, in a "It made me happy way," but nice as in "I can tell you worked hard on this. <33 The emotion in these words, it was incredibly tangible - incredibly.

I think the only thing I didn't like was the fact that we never got a name. You repeatedly said "He" or "His," and it got old incredibly quickly.

Other than that, I really, really liked this chapter. <33

2/3

Again, the detail in this is lovely. <33 It broke my heart yet, I couldn't tear my eyes from the computer screen. Your writing style is addictive and I am enjoying reading this.

So, now that I know some names, the only thing I'm not digging is the fact that there's nothing really solid to stand on other than the fact that something is wrong in the two men's relationship. This chapter was a touch more confusing than the first, but only because I'm not too sure what's going on physically.

3/3

And now everything makes sense, yes. <333 I wish I would've had a bit more indication of what was what in the ealier chapters, but still, this was a good read.

I can understand why he didn't want to let the other guy love him, but then again, if he was offering to try, why not give it a chance before he gave up? Maybe I'm just the optimist, aha. I wonder if that makes him strong for giving up before he got hurt again. Brave and more self preserving.

Regardless, this was an amazing read. I enjoyed all the detail and emotion very very much. <33 :)