Tell - Comments

I adored this. I was actually thinking of writing a story where a boy tries to tell another boy that he likes him without actually saying it but I think this was so much better than anything I am capable of. I loved the repetition of the word she to begin each paragraph; like loverfayce. said, it made it seem like a list while still remaining as a story. I think you did an amazing job at bringing something like this into words and I love how you represented how oblivious the boy managed to be.

So, to put it simply, I loved this.

Yes, it is a standalone. I didn't know what else to write about it, so I just left it as is. And yep, I actually did intend on every sentence beginning in the same way. But I'm really glad you like it! :)

Is this a standalone? Have to ask that, first. I sort of hope it's not.

I love how to us, it's easy to see she likes him (loves him?) even though you never say it, either. And this is a small, maybe unintentional thing but I love love love how every sentence starts with a "She ___(verb)___." It makes the whole thing seem like a list, but very cohesive at the same time.

I can also relate to this. A lot. And that makes me like it even more.

I love this so, so much.
It describes humans, especially girls, so well.
Your writing is just perfection. :3