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ZOMG you finished this! Poor Ronnie has been screwed over and now he wants his revenge! I'm not sure if Max is the victim or not, either way. Jesse is a douche. Yay for sequels!

DAMMIT MAX!!!
YOU WERE SUPPOSED TO BE A GOOD GUY!
AHHH!
Sorry. I just had to get that out. And yes, I will have to kill him. (Not literally.)
I'm gonna go wait for the sequel now :3
And I hope he gets Max back good. he deserves everything he gets >:(

No!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Jesse's a fucking douche bag :(
And I wish he would just tell Ronnie.
And Max better not hurt Ronnie, or I swear to Tumblr, I will kill him o.o
Maybe.

No!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Jesse's a fucking douche bag :(
And I wish he would just tell Ronnie.
And Max better not hurt Ronnie, or I swear to Tumblr, I will kill him o.o
Maybe.

I uderstood the ketchep part... i understood it all... but wat is he on? I think its meth... my guess bcuz hes ya nevermind...

You should write some more poems girl. :P
Love your story as always. (:

I've read some of the squeal she's writing.. BE EXCITED. ITS FANTASTIC. SEX ON FIRE.

He cant be in the sequel! D:... he gave him drugs and hes withdrawling huh?

MAN SECS. OMFG THIS MADE MY FOOKING DAY. :D. Poor Maixeband Ronnie. Maybe you should update the sequel... Give us a forestaste? o.o. UPDATE SOON PLEASE!

ya he got pretty amazing.
Not just singing wise; everything, his lyrics, himself, everything is just great...
>.> whats going to happen?! Oh God i hope that guys not in the sequel!

I can't put into words how adorable this is ^.^

I seen it on utube but not in real life yet... im tryin 2 see him nxt month tho.... whose th8is jesse guy? i dnt lik him.

Woah, okay... I just sat down and read the whole thing.

Just thought I would give you a little constructive criticism. Throughout your chapters some of the paragraphs/sentences are spaced out oddly. For example:

Chapter 3: "He crawled out of his adobe hole of multicolored blankets and reached his hand out to
measure were I was..."

All it really does it makes the sentences/paragraphs a little harder to read at times.

Honestly, other than that your story is fantastic and I love the idea of young love between Max and Ronnie. I also like the fact you included the coming together of the band. It makes it a more reliable story line and really draws the reader in. You write beautifully and im excited to read more.

Keep up the good work :)

ps; sorry about the criticism I just think its nice when people give you feedback about ways to improve your writing.

Oh yay u r on my side too ^_^ ya but idk... they put it behind them so thats all that matters i think.

Plus the cd = epicness so what better way for ronnie to get revenge then that way?!

Dont do the ronnie jail thing :(... its sad and i read stories with them bcuz they dnt break apart like they did in real life and now ur gonna break them up? D: I wonder what side u picked?

Bout damn time!!!!! Anyway. Loved it. Now you're going to write a sequel when this is over. :D.

:D Hey Annie!! Thanks for mentioning me in ur chappy author note thingy. Hehe. HI!!! :)
Love the date scene. It's full of cute and I smiled a lot, so good job gurl! Keep it up!

Awwww so fucking cute!

AWWWWWH
My heart melted. Foreal<3 That was soo cute. My inner fangirl will be satisfied for a lonng time. Just. AWH. It mwade meh feewl awl warm and fwuzzy<33

Sequel would be great, but whenever it involves Ronnie going to jail I usually end up in tears<\3 But I like crying. Idk ahhaha I'm insane. Go for it, whatever you write I'm bound to love.

GO RONNIEH!!!! So romantic! Max is suck a pretty gurl.. I mean person with a penis.. Um, anyway! LOVED THIS SO FUCKING MUCH I WANNA HUG YOU AND SQUEEZE YOU AND CALL YOU SQUISHY! (Only if you wan to.)
:D