Forever My Dear - Comments

This is stunning. I agree with Linkin. You have wonderful detailing and descriptions, the kind that makes you feel like you're... legit there.

There are a couple of grammar mistakes, but not too many. A simple missing comma or misspelled word.

I love. :D

You have amazing detail and descriptions. I'm so hooked, I wanted to read more just from the dream. She said she was seducing herself and I was like, "Huh???"

There are a few places you missed letters in words, but everything was just so amazing! I definitely want to read more.

And I think the love/hate relationship between her and her adopted sister is kind of funny. In my own, weird little way.

I must have more!! Ha.

I really like the picture in the layout. It is really, really pretty. And the layout itself it beautiful as well. I love how the beginning of the first chapter was just a normal day in her life, and her semi-complaining about her family. I think it is interesting to find a family in a story with parents who adopt many children. I don't usually see that in a story, and I find it really interesting. I really like how you introduced the woman in the end of the first chapter. Anyway, overall this is a really unique and interesting plot. Well done!

The layout is really hard to read. The banner is good, but maybe putting a solid color or something?

Anyways, this is very original. I never read anything like it. So, for that fact I really like this.

I would've liked more information about who the woman in the road was and such, and more on the family but whatever.

I saw a couple of grammar mistakes, but with a quick look at it I'm sure it'll be great.

Good job. (:

As always wifey I adore it! :]

This is really good.
I like the mystery within the first few paragraphs about the 'specific dream' It really grabs your readers.
I liked your descriptions, you used simple words but ordered them in a really nice well so there was a brilliant flow to the story and it added to the mystery.
I loved the plot in this piece too!

AH I love it! If someone said that they had been stalking me since I was 5 I'd probably be freaked out to lol.