April 2nd, 2011 at 01:16am
You have amazing detail and descriptions. I'm so hooked, I wanted to read more just from the dream. She said she was seducing herself and I was like, "Huh???"
There are a few places you missed letters in words, but everything was just so amazing! I definitely want to read more.
And I think the love/hate relationship between her and her adopted sister is kind of funny. In my own, weird little way.
I must have more!! Ha.
There are a couple of grammar mistakes, but not too many. A simple missing comma or misspelled word.
I love. :D