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  • FlyersGirl85

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    I absolutely love this story. It's very well-written.

    However, just as a note to help you improve (and it's a small thing, you write very well), when writing dialogue, leave out the "ehs". They are very disruptive for the reader. I know that's how people normally talk, but it ruins the natural flow of dialogue in stories.
    April 24th, 2011 at 10:50pm
  • Dee Flyrs Grl

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    Can't wait to see where this ends up taking their relationship!
    Great update!
    April 24th, 2011 at 01:28am
  • pineapple55

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    great as always! can't wait to see what happens next in their relationship!
    April 23rd, 2011 at 09:34pm
  • Jayla1231

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    SO cute. Claude is adorable.
    April 23rd, 2011 at 12:39am
  • ThingCalledLove

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    Wonderful update. I'm pissed at Mibba though, since it never told me you updated :( but good thing I randomly check anyways. Oh my Lord, they had sex...like alot. haha that was awesome. I didn't even notice the lack of the condom the second time, but I just read over it, and it didn't seem like they used one. Uh oh.
    April 22nd, 2011 at 11:23pm
  • devilsfan302617

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    FINALLY WITH THE TOGETHER-NESS!

    do I smell babies? 'cause no condoms usually results in babies :3

    loving the not so gay gay bestie

    this is amazing. seriously.
    April 22nd, 2011 at 09:55pm
  • AliNicTem

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    Finallly!! :D together at last! :) I hope the update is sooon! :)
    April 22nd, 2011 at 08:12pm
  • sammysexkitten

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    love this chapter update when you can! im glad their together now!!
    April 22nd, 2011 at 07:54pm
  • KayPx3

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    YAY! they're finally together :]
    April 22nd, 2011 at 07:28pm
  • shortoneLHS2006

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    Cant wait for more :)
    April 22nd, 2011 at 06:39pm
  • Girouxdyk2128

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    Yay for the update but agreeing with everyone above me... no condom, eh?

    I smell bumps along the road! And aww with Carle being the gay bestie who actually isn't gay! :D
    April 22nd, 2011 at 02:17pm
  • mully17

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    FINALLY!!!!

    They need to be together, I still think more Hartnell :P

    Hopefully they win tonight
    April 22nd, 2011 at 11:17am
  • Emiliana

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    I do not believe they used a condom either. Ruh roh. Amazing update though! Can't wait for more.
    April 22nd, 2011 at 09:06am
  • Liars' Pants On Fire

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    Hmm. They didn't use a condom the second time. I kind of feel like a pervert, going back and re-reading it over and over, just to find out if they used one or not at the end. :|

    Still a fantastic update! :D I'm glad it's finally out!
    April 22nd, 2011 at 07:23am
  • mully17

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    Good to see some flyers fans on here!!! Love this!! More hartnel lol
    April 19th, 2011 at 11:09am
  • shortoneLHS2006

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    Please update soon :)
    April 19th, 2011 at 02:15am
  • jessthebest

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    Update soon!
    April 18th, 2011 at 04:22am
  • shine.in.the.sun

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    aaah! love this story, update sooon!
    April 16th, 2011 at 08:58pm
  • Dee Flyrs Grl

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    The ending to this chapter... wow.
    Great update!
    Can't wait to read more!!
    April 16th, 2011 at 02:52am
  • tj oshie.

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    i can't even... so good. i'm at a loss for words right now. haha i absolutely love your writing. this is honestly one of the best stories i've ever read. i can't wait for an update! :)
    April 15th, 2011 at 10:21pm
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