So, you entered this for a contest of mine from forever ago. No one really turned in their entries after you did, and of the entries I did get, this was my favorite. Guess this means you won :)
And it didn't sound like a robot, but it didn't really sound like a first-hand account, either. It kind of sounded like someone was watching Tiffany and trying to write what it was like from her (Tiffany's) perspective. hopefully that makes sense. >.> I'm not the most eloquent person today.