February 23rd, 2016 at 08:10am
Ryston - Comments
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I am beyond impressed by your writing, wow! Your voice is absolutely wonderful. I don't know you but I feel like I'm listening to you speak as I read the story. Such attention to detail too! I aspire to write like you, and I'm working on it, I just do not have the patience you so obviously do. I really like the character Aaron, I feel like I can relate to him, I feel like most people could probably relate to him. Overall though, wow! You've got some talent to be proud of.June 27th, 2014 at 03:02am
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You have a good story starting. You have the setting set up nicely and your character and plot development is coming along really well so far. You use enough detail to get your point across without overdoing it. I can't wait to see how this goes. I also like the songs that you used, and I'm glad you credited them because a lot of people forget that.June 26th, 2012 at 03:03am
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Simple layout, but it's easy to read from, yet still designed nicely.
As for your writing, all I can say is wow. Not only are you very thorough in detailing and description, but you actually take decent time out to develop ideas and themes. It took you a few long paragraphs to detail Ryston College, but it was well worth it. You allowed me to paint a terrific mental image.
I didn't pick up any grammar or spelling errors either. All in all you are extremely talented, and have a great future in writing ahead of you.June 26th, 2012 at 02:21am -
This is pretty much amazing. More soon, please! :PDecember 12th, 2011 at 09:49pm
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I'm so in love with this story!! Please update soon :)December 12th, 2011 at 09:22am
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I was so very close to crying when I noticed that there were only three chapters D:
Update soon :)December 12th, 2011 at 08:14am -
I'm really loving this story. You've achieved a perfect balance in respect to descriptive language, and your pacing is just right. I'm already addicted, please update soon!October 3rd, 2011 at 05:18am
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yay!! update....fyi i am now a glee fan...and you were one of the people who encouraged it and now more things in this story make sense!October 2nd, 2011 at 09:21pm
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great chapter! i'm really exited that Aaron and Julian are getting closer! ♥
can't wait for more!! ツOctober 2nd, 2011 at 02:47pm -
I'm now really hungry for guacamoleOctober 2nd, 2011 at 02:35pm
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and Aaron’s great with talking to about my feelings, him being gay and stuff
I loved this partOctober 2nd, 2011 at 02:21pm -
I loved*October 2nd, 2011 at 02:10pm
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Inloved the captain America movie
(Aaron is adorable)October 2nd, 2011 at 02:10pm -
**PAGECLAIM**October 2nd, 2011 at 02:03pm
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IMMASEEWICKEDONBROADWAYSOON.
and that's what aaron's song reminded me of
(also, in glee, I'm incredibly excited for them to do west side story [which I have seen on broadway and it was amazing])
also, in Dalton, doesn't Blaine call Kurt ace?October 2nd, 2011 at 02:03pm -
HEY. HEY. HEY.
chapter?
please?
<3October 2nd, 2011 at 01:14am -
UPDATENOW.
please.August 1st, 2011 at 12:50pm -
aaron may not know where the nickname came from, but i doAugust 1st, 2011 at 12:38pm
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i just have to make the connection of the mentioning of gap to when blaine sang to that guy at the gapAugust 1st, 2011 at 12:36pm
Your ability to describe everything is very impressive, your descriptive voice is something to be proud of. Not many people have the patients to write for as long and as descriptive as you do. I enjoy the third person point of view and how each character is different in their own way. Some writers have a tendency to put themselves in all their characters so you can see the similarity and they bleed together as the same character with a different name. Not many write same-sex stories, or at least I haven't noticed too many, but just like any romance I would read I'm glad you aren't rushing it. I'm sick of people throwing their characters in love and then having them break up but then find out that they're meant to be in the first couple of chapters. So good job. I definitely think you should be proud of this story and the content.
I've only read the first chapter but I'm wondering if Aaron ends up going towards Kyle or Julian, hmmm!