Daughter of a Death Eater - Comments

Mmmk, so I finished with part 1. I must say I quite enjoyed the fact that she's all "Holy Dumbledore, I'm a BAMF!". I mean, it is a bit overpowering at first. I mean, there's a very, VERY fine line between advancing in knowledge and talent with magic, and over-exaggeration of power making it unbelievable. Apparently that fine-line is a wand dipped in basalisk venom and you're kind of dancing around on it.
I like the discriptions, it really does emphasize the story well.

The one thing I had a major problem with is the dialogue. More specifically, the diction of the dialogue. See, people don't talk like that. Especially those who ignored their education to follow some evil guy with no nose. I enjoy the conversation, but in the end, all I can think is "dafuq did I just read" like that meme. If you want to make it really enjoyable for others, keep the dark tone without going fully victorian-era on the dialogue.
Otherwise, you're a great writer and when I have time, I'll finish reading the story! Can't wait!

Hmm, well I was looking over the story and the comments I gave and, well, to be honest, they're crap. I'm sorry. :(
I love how apathetic she is to everything and how she isn't ruled by emotions such as Draco or Harry. However, they may propose a problem as the story goes on and you start to develop your character more. On the other hand, maybe her emotions will come out more when Umbridge starts to play on her nerves more as it was starting too in the last chapter.
Sorry if this was too analytical. I was trying to make up for my last comments.
This story is awesome, by the way. :)

"Would your father be mad if I hexed her foot into her mouth"
I died. Hahaha
You are a fantastic writer and I can't wait to see what comes next!
(Still all for the her and one of the twins ending up together...can't help it.)
Update soon please!!

:D Lovely.

AHAHHAHAHA how mad would your father be if i hexed her foot in her mouth..? ahahahhahhahahah LOVE IT!!!! ahah :D <3333333333333 update soon LOL

Awesome story. I've just gotten back from a hiatus, so it's good to see it didn't have 50 someodd chapters added.

Great two chapters! Really loved them! :)

Great Chapter :) please keep it up.

lol i like the part where she finds him in the bathroom
update again soon please!

Brillant. I love it.

Brillant. I love it.

I really really love this so far. Update soon please?? :)

omg imm sooooo excited for the next update i wonder what draco's gonna do... :0

very good. I love the attention to detail and the over all effect this gives. It's nice to see a story from this persective.

plz right more I really like it

uppppdate..itd be cool if she ended up with a george or harry. ha.

Hahaha! This is amazing, I hope you update soon!

This is actually really funny and amusing. It's well-written and I wouldn't be surprised if Ruinaira(sp0) turns out to be Bellatrix's birth daughter in the end. :O

wow this is amazing... do you think you could update this? :) <333 woow

This is really fantastic! I hope you can continue, because I'm addicted.

Update soon, yeah?