Innocence Lost - Comments

Hey this is wonderful! I like the idea of this story because usually readers are given a females perspective for this type of story, however you chose differently and I like that. Elliot will make an interesting guardian, we shall see whats to come of him in the next update. Also you wrote this well Good job :)

This is very nice. I like how Elliot decides to take care of this little girl despite the doubts he has about himself. Also, I think you're writing technique is very good. You're descriptions are detailed, but it's not too much. Keep it up!

I like this story, like a lot! lol definetly keep going. I can't wait to see what happens!