Broken Soldier - Comments

This is a very powerful chapter. I've always wondered what a man might feel like if he were falsely accused of rape. Your story could have used a bit more description — for instance, I had no idea where he and his friend were the entire time. I liked how you said his parents had doomed him by sitting on Elizabeth's side, that's a very nice detail.

About your layout, it's very painful to the eyes because of the white letters. Maybe put a white background around your story area and then have your letters black, it would be much easier on the eyes, especially since by the looks of it, there will be a lot to read. (:

I really like this, the characters are really great and I think you have the start of something wonderful here.
I like your descriptions and the movements of the characters..
I'm subbing :D

Oh my. I love it. The beginning is so emotional I wanted to cry. It's amazing.