Precious - Comments

"She was trying to be spontaneous, but that quickly unfolded into pure devotion." I love this line! This is a very cute little story. The first sentence grabbed my attention and there were a few other good lines sprinkled through out. The only part that I would suggest working on would be when you write about the girl's past. I would think that if the puppy really reminded her so much of the bad things that happened to her, she might not want it. I would suggest maybe making the ever lasting companioinship of the puppy a metaphore for having to deal with her past. If that's what you were going for I'd make it a little more apparent. Otherwise, to me, it's just another reference to a bad past that's become too overused on this site.

Oh my golly, this was illegally adorkable! It reminds me of me and my dog, Jewel, and how she came into my life unexpectedly in a pink basket and absolutely changed everything that I believe in. This was short, sweet, and to the point; honestly, it made my heart squeeze with happiness and love. I had to kiss my own baby after reading this, it was just so cute. I rarely see adorable stories like this on Mibba and I have to admit that it's a damn shame. But anyways, this story really brightened up my day and it was just...so cuteeeee! :D I loved it so much <3
Lovely job, hun! <3

Beautiful. That is all I have to say to you darlin :) I absolutely loved this story. It was short, sweet and to the point. Sometimes we all need a friend like that whether it is a human friend or a furry companion. Your writing is flawless and well descripted. You had my attention from start to finish. Amazing work on describing how the dog stayed with her through it all. I absolutely eenjoyed reading this story :)

Aww, this is very sweet! I loved it. It really showed the bond between people and their dogs perfectly, and Precious seemed like a great dog. I can't find any mistakes in this. Well done. :D

Wow, how the puppy-Precious-changed her life.
This is the kind of story that may bring tears to some people's eyes. Probably my favorite short story that I've seen on mibba.
Ah, and looking at the picture, I would never have thought of a story this great and well-written just by looking at that picture, which really adds to the picture.
Nice job.

So so so so so sweet! (I wish smilies worked on story threads because that would be the perfect one to describe my face right now!

This was so adorable. I'm glad that it was short - not because it was easier or quicker to read or anything - but because I didn't feel like it needed to be expanded upon. It had a simple underlying concept, that keeping it simple and marking the similarities throughout their companionship was just... adorable and amazing. It was really good. Similarly, I really like how we didn't find out everything about the past of your main character. It made me feel like the future was the only thing that mattered, which was touching. Since she had gained Precious, she didn't need anything else, nor did she need to remember the terrible past she'd had.

I've never been allowed a dog in my life, because my mother doesn't like them. This story has made me want one more than every before. I'm a dog person more than a cat person, so this story really speaks to me. Not to mention the layout with the simple picture, which sums up the whole thing perfectly, was just ... awh. I'm squee-ing from cuteness.

Overall a very well-written feel-good story. I enjoyed it a lot.

I wasn't sure what to expect when I claimed this story but I will say that I"m glad I did. It's very sweet and it made me smile, these are the short stories I like on Mibba. These stories that have so much raw emotion always make me wonder if maybe it reflects the author's life, in this case yours. If not then you definitely have a way with words and capturing your readers. The photo is absolutely precious and it flows well with the story's mood. This was great, well done.

I thought this was absolutely adorable!
I'm a big fan of pets in stories, and I find that it's rarely something I see done well, but this totally satisfied my craving for a cute pet story.
It really reminded me of my own relationship with my dog Durden, who was a shelter rescue, and I really loved how you described that immediate bond between the girl and Precious. I thought that was pretty much spot on.
I also really liked the last line, I felt like it brought the story to a nice close, though I would have liked to have read more.
The only suggestion I have to offer would be to go more indepth with it. Explain how Precious made the main character feel while she was going through those rough times and how she could relate her past to the puppy's. I feel like you have a good plotline and idea going here, but I think it could be that much better if you extended on it a little more.
Overall, great job! =)