The Lonely Dying - Comments

I love this! You did a great job describing everything, I could picture it all in my mind. I could also feel the character's emotions, it was just great!

This just, uh, I have difficulty finding words for it.

Ok, so the characters are charming they're real, the scene is real the actions are modest it's all there. I felt like I just joined in on their life together or something, it was just so good. I love everything and my current favourite character is Avery. He's especially well written and his charismatic personality is really shinning.

I adored the background information on Sarah and her friends, it really tied in her past and the fact that everyone was giving her odd looks at the funeral. It really helped me understand because I was confused in the beginning.

I can't think of a singly phrase I liked best, they were all amazing. On top of all these normal-Heather-loves things there was something else that I just can't put my finger on. The chapter flowed so well that it was petrifying. I literally sat their for an extra thirty seconds wondering where the rest was.

Sweet baby jesus I love this.

I have no criticism for this story. It was just wonderful...

The characters were well developed, and the way that they tied into each other was perfect. Also, the plot flowed excellently and the details were dropped in at the right points.
It wasn't choppy or rushed at all, yet it didn't drag on either.

Yes, anyway. I loved it. You produce quality work.

The banner is lovely first off. But personally it was hard for me to get into this story. Maybe it just wasn't my cup of tea, so to speak. But I did, however, adore your characters they weren't boring and I loved reading their conversations. I also had to default the story because on my computer it was very difficult to read.

How in the world are there no comments on this yet? I don't get it! I loved this chapter! I love this whole concept of the story! I think it's very exciting! I love how you incorporate little bits of modern with the little bits of things that are, in essence, Sherlock Holmes. I also adore the fact that you have Lestrade so key in the group! It makes me really excited and glad that I'm subbed to this!