Hm... you did a great job with this. Interesting... interesting... but I must ask: are you making this a story? Or is it just a one-shot? Because I figured it was a one-shot since you said it's for a contest, but I wasn't sure since you put it as chapter one. If it's a story, let me know, and I'll subscribe. But if not... like I said, you did a great job with this! :D I hope you win! :D
March 26th, 2011 at 02:46am