Lights. - Comments

Ugh, that was so good. I loved the title and that picture of Dean. I loved that it was only one paragraph and it was really amazing. I loved that he was running to get to a better future because I just want him to be so happy but it was so sad what happened at the end. I’m assuming it was the Hell Hounds that got him? If not, it was still good. I felt bad that he didn’t make it because you could tell that he really wanted it by the way he was running.

So yeah, I really enjoyed reading this.

Throughout the whole drabble, I felt that he was going to get what he wanted – to be free. I feel like, when he forces himself to run faster, that the thought of him making it to his destination is rising, until what he wants does not happen. The ending made me a little sad because that determination came crashing down on him because he could not continue. This was a wonderful drabble and the idea of it was very interesting and unique.

This was a very, very unique piece of writing. I love how the story wasn't about literal running; the continuous metaphor was really powerful. I also liked how the character was running towards the light in this story; obviously, the light is usually death but I interpreted it as life in this case. That ending made my stomach sink slightly though; every thing was so hopeful right up to that point. However, I think that made it seem more realistic; there's always going to be setbacks before we finally achieve peace in our lives.

Overall, this was very well written. It was quite intense and I could relate to it as well. (:

Woah, yeah, some pretty powerful stuff here. It feels like you're running with him, even though I get the feeling that this is a metaphorical running. Actually I'm pretty sure it is. xD Anyway yeah, I liked how you varied your sentence structures, like there would just be one word but then that last sentence is long; it's a little thing that most people overlook but if there aren't different sentence lengths, it wouldn't be as powerful. And I loved that last line, with the animal fangs dragging him back to his past.

I liked it, it was short yet intense. ^^

I like it so far, love the style and I absolutely love the pic you used for the layout ^_^

I liked the beginning and how you gave us this false hope feeling that this character was going to finally be free from his pain, but nope. The ending was something I wasn't expecting at all and I liked the tension and suspense you had going on. The emotion this character was feeling about running away from everything is something a lot people your age and mine can relate to and how something so small or trivial can pull us back down into the dark and take over our soul that fast is sad. I liked that aspect of your short story.

I loved it. It was so intense and the twist was great! The descriptions were incredible. I love your style.

Wahh, I loved this! <3

This is actually really good. The whole turn around with the light, it was pretty intense.
Great read. Keep up the great work =]