In My Mouth. - Comments

I love this story so fucking much <3

Second time I've read this! I love it so much! <3

Love it <3

Ok, so I'm gonna be the person whose comment is the shortest because I usually don't write long ones and because I'm still somewhat awkwarded out that I read all parts of this series. It was, as Ryan kept saying, dirty and it left me feeling the same. Doesn't mean I stopped reading as it was horribly enthralling as is everything of yours I've read. And by horribly enthralling, I mean great.
I'm sorry for not commenting on the other parts, I just...was compelled to click the link to the sequels first and now that I caught up I tried! I think. Hope you enjoy my random babble of attempted praise!!!

Dru, oh, Dru. Your entire Submission & Discipline 'verse is honestly one of the most beautiful things I've ever seen. You write everything so perfectly; I've noticed in reading things like this that sometimes it just comes off unrealistic, or too dramatic, but you don't have that problem at all. The relationship between Ryan and Brendon is something I can actually see, and no matter what they're doing I can tell that that still love each other.

I guess what I'm trying to say is that you take my breath away with your perfect writing. You should definitely do more in this 'verse, since you have such a strong hold on it. <33

I thought this kind of stuff only existed on livejournal, omfg.
I totally fell in love. You've written these so nicely that it's not awkward or anything and I really love that. I mean, there's nothing worse then awkward porn, right?
And, also, I found it interesting that this isn't AU which I thought it was just from reading the summaries.(if that makes sense)
All in all, I really loved it and you and I want more <333

Well I'm not sure I can find the right words for this. Beautifully sadistic maybe? I can't lie and say I didn't enjoy it though. At first i thought Brendon was simply a heartless men you lived to tease little boys, but you can tell he has feelings for him in the end and I thought that was a nice touch.

Ah I love that opening quote it sets things to go off from a high platform. Again layout is nice but i think it was more or less the banner/pic that brought it together than the actual background.

That first paragraph made me smile. Maybe because it captures so much reality lol.The reader always loves what they can relate to. I'm not a grammar nazi so I don't know if it's right or wrong but Ryan didn't know how he'd be able to look Spencer in the face if he knew what Ryan begged Brendon to do to him. I think the second Ryan should be he instead but idk.

"Can you give me a reason you deserve it?" I love how much this says about the character the situation and this phrase is just like a really great sum up of character I can't even describe it lol.

Description becomes a little listy in the next bit but not bad and still pretty good imagery/figurative language so it doesn't draw away. I think it's all a little humorous like in a aha isn't our relationship so odd love ya filthy bitch kinda way. I skimmed over some parts that would mentally scar me and pop up in the back of my mind unexpectedly but I think that lasting impression is the sign of a good writer.

Again I love the character change at the end and it sort of adds to that humor I mentioned before it's like a sickly sweet sort of thing and since you make it work kudos to you. (Comment swap)

So, I'm not going to lie: as soon as I saw that you posted a layout for this, I subscribed so I could know when it was posted.

First of all, I really love how Brendon uses names in bed (even though there's no bed involved) and Ryan likes it. Speaking of which, I like Ryan's mentality in regards to being a whore. I love that he delights in thinking that he's a whore when he tastes himself.

And I love Brendon's actions when watching Ryan. The older boy leaned forward, still lazily palming his erection, watching Ryan violate himself as if it were simply an interesting television program. This bit was especially well written in that sense. I love when a dominant has that attitude of expectancy from a submissive. They don't necessarily get excited watching, but at the same time, they do, they just expect the submissive to do it and they know it's going to happen. Sorry if I'm not making sense, but it was a coherent thought in my head, I swear, hah.

Like I said in Milk's comments, I think you write the BDSM relationship beautifully. And though I'd normally dislike the vanilla at the end, I actually quite like how Brendon changes from calling Ryan a slut to calling him baby. I like that he's not guilty or overly concerned about Ryan's state. He cares about him, but he doesn't worry too much. I feel like it's an understanding thing more than an abuse thing though.

And kudos on no grammar errors.

Pretty much, I love your kink stories, and I know how much comments mean, so I'll get around to commenting your other ones when I'm less tired. Amazing job though. I don't think I've ever seen a better BDSM writer.

Comments on this series mean quite a lot of me. I have a lot more reads that I ever expected to for how hardcore this stuff is [especially "Milk"], but very few comments. I'm not trying to complain about silent readers, I would just really appreciate hearing your actual thoughts. I don't know if people are too disturbed too comment or too busy fapping, but those are both extremes and I'm just interested in knowing. A small comment telling me your thoughts would mean so much, truly.

xoxox
-dru