The CONquest of Nellie Bly - Comments

Did I mention that I love you? This story makes me SOOOOO happy darling. Plus it was the first update to any story I subscribed to in like, two weeks, so you get BONUS POINTS! And I'm glad Violet wasn't in this one because she's a poo-nanny. And Conor and Nellie got to be alone ;D
And, uh, WHEN THE HELL ARE NELLIE AND CONOR GOING TO GET TOGETHER?
That's all (: I can't wait to see what's going to happen next!

OHMYGODYESILOVEYOUSOMUCHFORUPDATING.
I love how real you make them feel, and how Conor's bitch rant was. That was the best part cause I felt so damn sorry for the poor boy :( And Violet needs to go die in a hole. She's the queen of all bitches. I very strongly dislike her. Why is she even alive? She makes me an angry human.
I think you should Incorporate tunak-tunak in there. Just cause it's funny.
Also? I LOVE YOU SO MUCH FOR UPDATING HOLY JESUS FUCK.
You. Make. My. Life. ♥

The relationship between Conor, Nellie and Violet is so... real. I can totally name some friends of mine that are like each of them. You did a really good job in introducing the characters and their personalities in the first chapter. I have to say, I really love the layout; it is really simple but quite beautiful. Keep up the good work.

The layout is so soft and nice and pretty. You can sort of sense that it's going to be a lighthearted summery romance and I like that.

adorable, I love the bit about the bib. True friends messing and teasing with one another, hells yeah~ The interactions are cute and soft and I like them because they're clearly very friendly. They're a little immature and you can sort of tell they're gonna grow up this summer but it's really cute.

Overall, I wish I totally had a friend like Conor. My life would be far more entertaining, I think. Well, I had Nick ,but... seniors graduate. He was hilariously like Conor now that I think about it.

I read the first chapter just to get a feel of what this story is like, and I can really see how the summary is identical to how these kids act. The only thing is, it was a really big...I don't know, turn off? For me to read this all the way through, and all they did was just...act immature. I mean, that's how it's supposed to start out and maybe I'm just one of those people who can't read about people goofing off, (which is weird because that's pretty much my occupation) but I couldn't get into it. Cool that they have this happy, neat relationship, and I think Conor's personality is sort of funny, but something just didn't feel right about the whole thing. I don't know how old they are, but even teenagers don't act THAT bad all the time.

I think the layout is really pretty, especially the background. It reminds me of the beach, which I really miss right now, haha.

Maybe you could revise this a little, take out some of the more annoyingly smart ass things that the kids say. It'd be a lot more of a good read. Your first chapter is what gets you subscribers and this doesn't have the depth that it could have! You can really improve because this has a GREAT story line to it. It'll just take some reading over.

I love Conor's puns. They had me literally laughing out loud. X)
I love the whole concept and the characters.
It's a very real story and is going on my "watch" list for sure!

Oh my goodness, this story is excellent. I love how your chapters have so much in them, and how you shaped your characters. I know people like Violet - the love-hate relationship she has with Conor is the same one I have with this guy at school, but with less profanity XD

I love your writing. I laughed so hard at so many things that I've scared away my cats.

Also, this kind of killed me a little bit. Because I'm 15, and my name is Molly.

Favorite lines:
He wrinkled his nose and picked up the salt-shaker. “That was inSALTing. Be careful what you say to me or I might DESSERT you.” He pointed to a slice of chocolate cake on the menu.
Conor returned the favor as well... He would wear some of my Beatles t-shirts and, sometimes, he would wear my miniskirts to school with butterfly hair clips.
“Weren’t we just street performing and eating ice cream? Just a little while ago?”
"I don't want to be alone. I wish I was pregnant or something. Because then I would never be alone. Ever."
"Are you sure you can't just hide in the back of my car and watch 'Say Yes to the Dress' with me tonight?"

Okay, so I love this. All the characters are so realistic and they make me laugh a lot. I'm going to subscribe and read more; brilliant, I must say.
My favorite scene was when they were in the hospital room. See real, so raw. I loved it.
Please keep on writing. <3

This story is amazing! I love it so much! I love each of the characters and their different personalities, you did a great job developing them. I even laughed out loud a couple times. I'm definitely going to subscribe.

So, um... I never reply to comments, but I really have to clear some stuff up for you:

In no chapter does it describe Nellie's taste in music. Ever. She tells Conor to shut up when he plays "Airplanes" in chapter one, and while sitting in Martinelli's in chapter two, she mentions Justin Bieber and the Jonas Brothers and Rebecca Black, but nothing says she actually LISTENS to that kind of stuff-- in fact, she detests any band of that nature. Quite frankly, the Nellie character dislikes mainstream music and there is nothing to really say what her tastes are as of yet.

Maybe try to use a bit more evidence and just be a bit more specific...

This is confusing on so many levels. For one thing, Nellie has terrible taste in music, just sayin'. And then their reactions sometimes don't seem quite real but maybe that is just because of the shock factor. I think the most real that you see any of them is when they're in the hospital room. I think that was actually my favorite scene in this whole thing. It was very well written and it was so real which is something that means a lot to me when it comes to character development.

EEEEEEEE!!!!!!!! How frickin' cute!!!
Are you a happy human bean now?

Absolutely freaking amazing! I took my time reading this one. I legit had many LOL moments because we do all have friends like connor and violet, or at least I know I do. It makes me miss my friends, but I absolutely love the chemistry between these three. I loved how you developed them and I can follow everything that you are trying to get across.

Connor had a typical brother sister bond. Even though he didnt use words, you could still tell that he loved his sister, even before the accident. I was so upset that she died :( It was a sad moment and violet decided to be herself. Yea, that sucked ass, but I think with the character you are portraying for violet, she does not know how to reaact in situations like these, and thats what makes it tough. I could understand how she was feeling, but then again, she should have kept her mouth shut.

The ending was a little confusing, not for me, but poor connors feelings. Going for his best friend, though I think they make a cute couple. Either way, I absolutely love this story and I am subscribing cause I want to see where you are taking this and I really want to know why his sister just suddenly died. More soon darling. Please keep up the amazing and talented work! <3

Oh my god. DesAndNate quote FTW.
"He ran around wearing your prom dress for a week" XD You make me giggle :P

Oh my god... of course you would. This is fucking funny :3 You don't seriously smoke now, do you? o.o
....*subscribes*
You should feel honored. It's the first story I've subscribed to that isn't a fan fic.
Can't wait to read the next chapter Riley-Poo ♥

I likes it very muchly <3
It's great, don't delete it, I love Conor's attitude and how him and Violet are completely opposite.
Reminds me of some of my friends, keep it going for sure :)

Deifintally KEEP! I love the story and the charaters especially Conor! I love his attitude XD Its fantastic! Can't wait for you to start on the next chapter(:

Yay! New story! Yayayayay. :D This makes me happy! Anywho, I liked it. I died laughing over Conor's attitude. xD He reminds me of a kid at school named Sam! I totally think you should continue it. It's splendid.<3