This is amazing! please update!
March 3rd, 2013 at 04:18am
This is a comment for "Comment Swap" and is my offical point of view upon the story.
I only read the first chapter of each story I judge, and I must say this is better then most. Your story envelopes the reader into something personal that they can all connect to, whether it be Gay or just not fitting in. The moral of this story is something I see often on Mibba, High Shool, which isnt a bad subject but seems a bit overused, however it seems you have gotten your readers enough into it to cause them to overlook that demeaner. Now, back to chapter one.. The format you use on this story seems a bit odd, however it's still very clean and flowing. unlike some styles, however I can't help but find it annoying that every time I read something within it.. I feel like I'm reading a childs book (Maybe because I read all the "Song of ice and fire" collection.) However, I still enjoyed the story and if I had to rate it, 8/10 it's very flowing and moving without many grammical errors but I can;t get passed the format.
These comments are from my point of view and are in no way "Trolling" They are my professional opinion and nothing more.
Keep Writing
-Zeed
