Morte et Dabo - Comments

alright.” I say softly, rubbing gentle circles on - comma rather than a full stop.

will be.” He hisses, - comma and lower case 'h'

just go away.” He - same as the above ^^

The one that wouldn’t - 'who' rather than 'that'

The one that’s serious and doesn’t - ^^ same as above

go. I still love her.” He finishes, - comma and lower case 'h'

how to.” He whispers, - ^^ same as above

“Show me how.” He whispers, ^^ same again

I like how Cameron pushes James away and tells him he doesn't want him to forget her (was there a name mentioned?). I think that really speaks volumes for how the 'future' relationship between them will work; it's something more than what James was prepared to do. I don't know. :) But I thought it was really sweet.

I also liked how this was written in such a comforting voice/narration; it was just simple, sweet, sympathetic and reassuring. It was understanding and that really made it what it was. :) Just a lovely story.

He cried softly again, but this time he cried because he was free. He wasn’t trapped in a never ending maze of depression, shaking and miserable. He was at peace again, and that’s all I ever wanted. - I think this is a lovely paragraph to end the 'story' on. :) I like that he's free from the emotional turmoil he's been going through and that someone's there to help him and that he kind of finally recognizes that. :) It's lovely.

When I was reading the "lyrics" to Dedication I seriously felt like crying. This was really great, darling!(: Thank you for writing it(:

I adore this.
So, so, so well-written. I wanted to cry at the end. And I never cry.
But I digress. Kudos to you; a great intro to a great story.
Update soon, preferably before I go absolutely barking mad, yeah?

Cam and James in any sense are fucking hot, so 'together' it's even better =]
Y'know what? I kinda liked that it wasn't all quick talk then sex.
This was more real.
So yeah...great job!
=]