October 21st, 2011 at 02:39am
Unique Imagination - Comments
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You're doing really good so far. But you'll need to work on spelling and grammar, and it would make it neater to put space between the paragraphs. The writing could be a lot stronger if the simple things would be fixed. Also, changing the sentence structure in paragraphs and not using the same word a lot would help as well. Changing around the sentence structure could build suspense more and make things more powerful. You're doing alright so far, so keep writing! If you need any specific help, you can ask me.October 20th, 2011 at 10:38pm
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This story is fucking amazing!!
*giggles like a schoolgirl*
Anywhoo!! I can't wait to read more!! But until then... ^_^October 19th, 2011 at 10:32pm -
wait isn't james Alyssa's beau?!? IM SO CONFUSED!September 11th, 2011 at 09:43pm
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Very awesome so far. :) Keep up your super-extraordinary writing! :)May 6th, 2011 at 02:43am
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Awesome as allways. Update soon.April 15th, 2011 at 02:29am
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posted more chapters, don't ask why so many at once - at me grans for a few days an havin no internet kinda sucked so i wrote a few chapters to help cope lol how sad am I? =) anyways hope u like 'em! =]
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Oh my god. THIS STORY IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Please, Please, PLEASE. Update Soon!!!!!!!!!!April 10th, 2011 at 04:25am
Opened the wrong drawer!! *gasps* Ohh my fucking Gerard!! *le dead*
I need to see James!!!!!! *le grabby hands*
When James was all *flails hands* about not thinking about Mirriam's mom's last name since Mirriam is adopted was cute, annoying, but cute!
Anywhoo!! This is a great chapter!! I can't wait to read the next update!! But until then... ^_^