Coffee Shop Love - Comments

This story is actually very well written. The grammar is only a few mistakes. And, I love the layout. The love between Oliver and Liam is really present. And I love how, Liam is just so hopelessly romantic. It's absolutely adorable, and even though you can tell that he's a little childish because of his characterization, but it fits well. I think the playful banter was a nice touch, usually some people go over board, but I think it's the right amount. I say it's a fantastic job on this kind of slash, and kudos to you. Seriously, I adore this.

This is adorable. :)
You've done a really good job, the grammar was also good.
:)

It's so cute. ( :
Plus, Oliver and Liam are so right for each other.
Too fast paced, but it's a three shot, so yeah.

Nice job BRO. : ) <3

Loved it. Loved it. xD Ah. So cute. You're fine at grammar, just a few mistakes here and there, nothing big. Ha, ha. It was fast paced, but it was still wonderful and I liked the two main characters. So cute. <3 Ha, ha. So much blushing. I was blushing there too. *-* And they do have wonderful chemistry. I agree with Mat Devine. So...please keep weaving stories, because you are very good at it. ^^

I like this, its sweet and the chemistry between Liam and Oliver is quite clear here which is really good. This is an interesting read and I shall continue to read it and its sequel :)

I thought the charcters realtionship moved to fast. However I thought it was very cute and full of fluffyness. I like what Liam said about unknown numbers, I feel the same way.

First of all, I really like the title. It just adds to the cuteness of the story. I'm not necessarily into slash, but I love it when they aren't full of sex, and this one made me smile. Innocence really makes a love story into something more. And I really like the names Oliver and Liam.

One of my favorite lines in the whole story was,

"I said, laughing at my own corny joke, and soon enough, Oliver was laughing along with me, two beautiful melodic voices floating through the airways."

My only suggestion to you is to proofread chapters a few times before they are published. I did notice quite a few grammar and spelling mistakes. Otherwise, good job! :)

So cute, seriously. It's lighthearted and simple and I like how they're both sort of playfully bantering. It almost seems quickly paced, but that's alright, and the cheesey little pick up lines made me beam. Very nicely done and super, seriously adorable.

This is a really sweet story. The narrative flows really well and the banner is really pretty. I love the idea, and how simple it is. The characters are lovely, and all in all it’s a really nice idea and you’ve pulled it off really well. There are a few grammatical errors but nothing too huge that I couldn’t read, and the text is kind of hard to read against the dark pink background. But those are the only criticisms. Well done!

I just read the first chapter but it was cute. I like the way it was written the tension between Liam and the main character. I also like your attention to detail although there were a few phrases that were worded funny or just wrong, for example "I stood on line..." should be I stood in line. Things like that. Otherwise, fantastic. :)

awwn C':
Second person that makes me love stories like this.
<33 amazing

Incredibly good. Seriously, this was just amazing. Crazy cute and adorable(:

i loved this story!! :)
and i can't wait for the sequel to come out, im going to go and subscribe right now :D

Maxxie this is too adorable. I love the innocence of their love in this story. It's so moving.

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D'AWH, WHY THEY HAVE TO BE SO ADORABLE?!?!?! :33
I love it! c:

D'awhhhhh.
Adorable. <3
As cute as they are, I think that this is one of those stories that you just leave it the way it ending. But I mean, depends on what you want. You're the writer.
And in anycase. I'd still read it. But okay. x]

I like how you write. This is so adorable. I hope you write more. :)