The Sweetness of Summer Strawberries - Comments

I think that this is an amazing story, and I think that you really need to continue it! I love the way you write! You are a true writer:)

I think this is quite well done. You have a good expressive voice, and the kinds of descriptions I like, like this:

Where we lived in Texas, the summer nights were always cool, always calm and refreshing; like drinking a tall glass of ice water after you've been working beneath that unforgiving sun all day.

I think it probably could have been a bit longer, if you kept up with this kind of style. Maybe we could have had a little background history about the situation, rather than just being asked to accept it at face value? This said, though, what you do have is definitely not bad.

You also round it off well, but the combination of this and the seeming incompleteness in the detail makes me wonder whether this is a one-shot, or the start of something longer. I'm leaning towards the second.

Anyway, you have some skill as a writer, and I think that carries it through. Nice job.

I love the title, the sweetness of summer strawberries drew me in first. Then the layout, which is lovely and beautiful. The strawberries and the background. The summary is amazing and then chapter. You wouldn't think of this story to be that, and it surprised me when I read it. The words are delicious and I could see everything in my mind. The way she sees her mother; beautiful even though her face is plum-colored and blood is coming down her forehead is just amazing. I liked that part. I didn't see any spelling mistakes, or grammar. So that's a thumbs up. I cannot wait for another chapter. I'm a subscriber

I am absolutely reading this. :D Cannot wait for when you post it. The layout is so pretty, and I love the theme of it.

I am deffentally Going to read this!!!:)